You have a wonderful mind
You make everything concise,
and full of purpose in my life.
You give me hope,
You are an amazing person.
I learn more and more about you everyday.
And all that I have learned:
I have loved.
For Adam. ♥
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I love this poem it is so sweet and romantic! I also love the writing but there are a couple nit picks I have. You may not agree and that is fine but here they are. The first three and last three lines I love and flow really well but the two in the middle feel like they were just last second thoughts. I like them and think you should still include them because that is about you and Adam and still connects with the rest of the poem. The first three lines flow really well and give you a complete feeling. It does not necessarily rhyme but it still flows together great. Now poems do not have to rhyme but in those lines you gave it that feeling, but when you go on the next couple lines feel like they are just there. They don't have the rhyme feeling like the beginning does and it makes it feel awkward. Maybe add another line in between the fourth and fifth, tying those two lines together. For example; And help lead me in the right direction. Now that wasn't the best example but just an idea. But overall I really do like this poem. It is straight to the point while still being from your heart and showing your emotions. I also like that it is short because it is like you want to say how amazing this person is but you can't make it to long because it doesn't need to be when you can always be with that person.
Keep up the great writing!
-Roxie Rain
Hello.
Kanome here with a review.
Even though it's short, it's straight to the point.
I love this poem because you wrote this from the heart, especially for a certain individual.
I love the wording of this piece.
It's simple and yet well-described for this individual.
- Why is this person amazing?
- How did this person give you hope?
These are the questions I would like to know.
You don't have to answer them now, but I would love to know in the future.
Keep up the great work.
I can't wait to read more c:
This person is amazing because they are my lover and my best friend.
They gave me hope, because through difficult times they encouraged me to not be so pessimistic, and they still do so.
PS: Thanks for the review.
Good. Very good.
But don't you think it is a little bit too short? I suggest you should include a couple of other stanzas too; which will surely make it look great.
Your flow was amazing too. I didn't find any problem with it. It is just that it was short; shorter than it should be.
Keep up the good work. And write medium-long size poems.
Have a nice day,
What's the problem with it being short?
No. Don't get me wrong. There is no problem with it being short.
When I started enjoying this work of yours, it ended
Ah ha. XD I see
It was based on a personal quote you see, so by nature it was short. XD
Sowwy