Eternal Beauty | Chapter 20

by RatHat

Published November 1, 2025

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“There is always some madness in love. But there is also always some reason in madness.”

— Frederick Nietzsche

The train station was quiet except for the soft murmur of announcements echoing over the loudspeakers. Kei sat slouched on a wooden bench, his head leaning back against the cold steel of the seat. The faint golden light of sunrise peeked over the horizon, casting long shadows across the platform. The air was crisp, a faint bite lingering even as the promise of warmth crept in with the dawn.

Beside him, Marin slept, her head resting against his shoulder. Her dark hair spilled over him, catching the soft light in silky strands. She looked peaceful, almost childlike in her sleep, but Kei’s thoughts were anything but calm.

His mind was a storm of half-formed ideas and feelings he couldn’t pin down. The memory of last night lingered—the stolen bottle of sake, Marin’s laughter ringing in his ears, the feel of her lips against his. She’d called him her boyfriend, and though the word had felt strange at the time, now it burrowed into his thoughts, refusing to leave.

Boyfriend.

He glanced at Marin’s hand, still resting lightly on his arm. It was strange, he thought, how natural it felt. As if she’d always been there, slipping seamlessly into a role he hadn’t known was vacant.

The screech of a train pulling into the station shattered the stillness. Marin stirred, groaning softly as she shifted against him. Kei stiffened as she blinked awake, her dark eyes heavy-lidded and unfocused.

“Morning,” she mumbled, her voice thick with sleep. Kei managed a weak smile. “Morning.”

Marin sat up, rubbing her eyes. Her movements were slow, almost lazy, but as her gaze sharpened, a sly grin tugged at her lips. “Don’t tell me you stayed up all night thinking about me.”

Kei felt his cheeks flush. “I—no! I just couldn’t sleep.” Her laugh was soft, almost teasing. “Sure, sure.”

As she stretched, the clink of hurried footsteps broke through their quiet bubble. Kei turned just as a group of businessmen approached, their suits rumpled and their expressions sharp.

“There they are,” one of them barked, pointing at Marin.

Kei shot to his feet, his pulse quickening. “What’s going on?”

The man gestured angrily. “You think we didn’t notice what you two brats pulled last night? That sake wasn’t cheap!”

Marin tilted her head, her expression feigning innocence. “I have no idea what you’re talking about.”

The man’s face reddened as he stepped closer, his hand shooting out to grab her wrist. “Don’t play dumb!”

Marin’s face twisted in a pained grimace as she tried to pull away. “Let go!”

Something in Kei snapped. He surged forward, his voice breaking with a raw intensity he hadn’t known he had. “Get your hands off her!”

The man turned, startled, but before he could react further, Kei shoved him back. The businessman stumbled, glaring at Kei with a mixture of surprise and anger.

“You little punk—”

Marin’s gaze pierced the air between her and the businessmen, as if she were taunting the men to hit Kei—to see what would happen if they dared.

The men hesitated, their anger faltering as they met Marin’s gaze. Her eyes gleamed with something cold, something sharp that made them falter.

“Leave,” Marin said, her voice low and measured. “Now.”

The men exchanged uneasy glances before backing away, muttering curses under their breath as they retreated.

Kei’s chest heaved as he watched them go, his fists still clenched. When he turned back to Marin, she was cradling her wrist, her expression softening into something almost vulnerable.

“Are you okay?” Kei asked, his voice shaky as he knelt in front of her.

Marin nodded, but her usual confidence seemed muted. “It’s nothing. Just a bruise.”

“Let me see.” Kei reached for her hand, his fingers gentle as he turned her wrist over. The faint red mark where the man’s grip had been made his stomach churn.

“You don’t have to fuss over me,” Marin said, her tone light but her eyes lingering on his face.

Kei didn’t respond. He traced the mark with his thumb, his touch featherlight. “You shouldn’t have to deal with stuff like this.”

Marin’s lips curved into a soft smile, but there was a flicker of something unreadable in her gaze. “You’re sweet,” she said, her voice quieter now.

Kei looked up, meeting her eyes. For a moment, the world around them seemed to fade, the early morning light casting a golden glow over everything.

The train’s horn broke the spell, and Marin pulled her hand back, slipping her arm around his shoulders as she stood. “Come on,” she said, her usual cheerfulness returning. “Let’s go home.”

Kei stood as the train doors opened, letting Marin guide him inside. As they settled into their seats, Marin leaned her head against his shoulder once more, her fingers lightly brushing his arm.

Kei stared out the window, the scenery blurring into streaks of color as the train sped forward. But his thoughts were fixed on Marin—on her laughter, her sharpness, her vulnerability.

For better or worse, she was changing him. And he wasn’t sure he wanted her to stop.

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Messenger
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Messenger wrote a review Review · Feb 14

Okay! Im back on track. Happy Valentines Review Day! Here representing the Roses of Red. Also, is the 4.5 chaoter just an edit of chapter 4 or is tgst supposed to be published somewhere else? Lemme know :D

Kei felt his cheeks flush. “I—no! I just couldn’t sleep.” Her laugh was soft, almost teasing. “Sure, sure.”

You've done this a few times, including once at the beginning of chapter 19 that I forgot to mention, where you need to separate character dialogue lines.

As she stretched, the clink of hurried footsteps broke through their quiet bubble. Kei turned just as a group of businessmen approached, their suits rumpled and their expressions sharp.

Clink seems like the wrong word for a bunch of guys traipsing around together. Especially if theyre hurrying. Maybe thunder or rumble.
Im not sure i buy them leaving just because Marin glared at them. Of they were drunk and angry all night all together, and still bothered to confront, I have a feeling at least one would be a little bit past reason, particularly the one who paid for it and got hoodwinked.

Kei didn’t respond. He traced the mark with his thumb, his touch featherlight. “You shouldn’t have to deal with stuff like this.”

HUUUH?? You literally stole from them ToT Kei is such an idiot

I really dont know where this story is going. Im hoping Kei regains some semblance of sanity and reason, but at this point he's kind of out of excuses for the levels of depravity he's sinking into o.O

~Messy

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Tikaya
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Tikaya wrote a review Review · Nov 29, 2025

Hach, this is such a joy to read.
I really like this line: “slipping seamlessly into a role he hadn’t known was vacant” and how he thinks abt Marin’s position in his life.

Oh no, the consequences of our actions. I’m so surprised these ppl actually remember them!
And I’m not sure I like this side of Marin: “to see what would happen if they dared.” I think I know why she does it but still ☹ I really wonder if she did want to see if Kei would defend her indefinitely. But then again, she did promise him that with her nothing would go wrong…

I continue to like their interactions afterwards.
I also agree with Kei’s assessment, that their interactions have an impact on him too. I really, really enjoyed these four chapters. Thank you for sharing 😊 Maybe, when the Green Room is empty, I will come back to read this in its proper order!

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Fannie
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Fannie wrote a review Review · Nov 1, 2025

Hey there, RatHat, it's Fannie. I'm here to review on this amazing masterpiece you wrote. I am curious about how you get to publish the stories so fast. Ohh, I found the answer, and it's that, you are a pure blood. Meaning you have the blood of an excellent writer in every part of your body. Keep it up, very soon, your books would be everywhere. Well done.
Love, Fannie.



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