Eternal Beauty | Chapter 10

by RatHat

Published September 11, 2025

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In Eternal Beauty

“What is it in ourselves that whispers, ‘It is no longer you’?”

—C.S. Lewis

The air in the classroom felt heavier today, as though the weight of the unspoken clung to the corners unmoving. Ms. Hawkthorne’s voice cut crisply through the stillness, her every syllable deliberate and measured, as if she were carving her words into stone.

“The importance of preparation cannot be overstated,” she said, pacing slowly between the rows of desks. Her black heels clicked softly against the wooden floor, the sound echoing faintly. “History favors those who are ready to meet it.”

Kei shifted in his seat, his pen tapping absently against the edge of his notebook. The large windows behind Ms. Hawkthorne let in pale, filtered light that softened the edges of her figure. Her white hair shimmered faintly in the glow, tied back in a severe bun that emphasized the angular lines of her face. She wore a sleek black blazer over a crisp white blouse, and her round glasses caught the light every time she turned her head.

She stopped at the front of the class, raising a single paper in her hand. “Some of you have taken this lesson to heart.”

The faint shuffle of restless movements rippled through the room, but no one dared speak. The students exchanged nervous glances, a few sitting up straighter in their seats.

Kei glanced at the empty chair beside him, where Kukui usually sat, and his chest tightened. Without her there to break the monotony with her whispered commentary and sly grins, the room felt lifeless. He sighed softly, slouching slightly in his chair.

When Ms. Hawkthorne approached his desk, she stopped and held his paper aloft for the class to see. Her sharp, blue-gray eyes met his through her glasses, and her lips curved into a small, approving smile.

“Kei Yukimura,” she announced, her voice carrying a rare warmth, “once again demonstrating the value of diligence. An A.”

The word hung in the air, drawing murmurs and glances from his classmates. Kei felt his cheeks grow warm under their gaze, and he ducked his head slightly, offering Ms. Hawkthorne a quiet “Thank you” as she placed the paper on his desk.

Around him, the room erupted in hushed groans and sighs of frustration as students examined their own grades—scattered B’s and C’s, red-ink corrections scribbled across their answers.

“Some of you,” Ms. Hawkthorne continued, her tone sharp now, “would do well to learn from him.”

Kei focused on the paper in front of him, tracing the neat red “A” in the corner with his eyes. He didn’t feel particularly proud, only vaguely embarrassed by the attention. The sound of the bell broke his thoughts—a deep, resonant chime that reverberated through the room like the toll of a distant church bell.

Students began packing their things, the scrape of chairs and the hum of conversation filling the air. Kei moved slower than the others, slipping his test into his folder and tucking it neatly into his bag.

As he stepped into the hallway, the energy of the school hit him all at once. The corridors buzzed with life—students laughing, shouting, shoving their way through the crowds. Lockers slammed shut, sneakers squeaked against the floor, and fragments of conversations floated past him.

Kei kept his head down, his steps steady but unhurried. He wasn’t heading anywhere in particular, but his feet carried him toward the student council wing almost by instinct. His thoughts were a jumble of memories, disjointed and insistent.

Sugei.

The name lingered in his mind like an echo, bringing with it a flood of images.

Sugei pulling him to his feet after a fall, his grin wide and toothy. The two of them scaling trees that creaked and swayed under their weight. Sugei tossing rocks into the creek, the water catching the sunlight as he dared Kei to see who could make the biggest splash.

Kei clenched his fists, his steps faltering slightly.

Now, those memories felt like they belonged to someone else entirely. The Sugei he knew had been a whirlwind of energy, loud, reckless and alive. But Marin…Marin’s soft-spoken nature, her delicate movements, her quiet smile—it was like watching a ghost in a borrowed body.

He hated the way his eyes lingered on her, noticing things he shouldn’t. The graceful tilt of her head, the smooth curve of her neck, the faint scent of lavender that clung to her skin. It made him sick to his stomach, this awful, creepy sense of attraction to someone he knew wasn’t entirely her.

By the time Kei reached the council room, his chest felt tight, his breath shallow. He pushed the door open, the faint creak barely registering over the sound of voices inside.

“I’m not crazy!” Yuta’s voice rang out, sharp and indignant.

“Right,” Yuki drawled, her tone dripping with sarcasm. She leaned back in her chair, her legs propped up on the table as she waved a pen lazily through the air. “Because nothing says ‘sports festival’ like science experiments.”

“Science can be exciting!” Yuta snapped, slamming her hands on the table. “Foam explosions, chemical reactions—”

“Yeah, because everyone wants to see something blow up during a relay race,” Yuki shot back, rolling her eyes.

“Enough,” Marin said, her voice cutting cleanly through the argument.

The room fell silent instantly, Yuki and Yuta exchanging sheepish glances. Marin’s gaze swept over them, calm but firm, her hands folded neatly on the table in front of her.

“We need to focus,” she said, her tone steady but with an unmistakable weight. “This festival is for everyone, not just your interests. Let’s keep that in mind.”

Yuki muttered a half-hearted apology, while Yuta crossed her arms and sank back into her chair, still fuming but silent.

Kei slipped into the seat beside Marin, pulling a folder from his bag. He opened it and revealed the neatly typed report he’d been working on for the festival. Marin leaned toward him, allowing her hair to brush against his shoulder as she glanced over the pages.

The scent of lavender hit him immediately, soft and faintly sweet. Her hand rested on the edge of the paper, the pale skin smooth and unblemished. Kei’s pulse quickened, his chest tightening in discomfort.

Marin glanced at him briefly, her eyes sharp but curious, before shifting her focus back to the report. She didn’t say anything, but the slight quirk of her brow told Kei she’d noticed his unease.

“Not bad,” Yuki remarked, leaning over the table to glance at the report. “You’re shaping up to be a decent secretary, newbie.”

Kei cleared his throat, forcing a weak smile. “Thanks.”

“You should join us for lunch,” Yuki added, grinning. Kei hesitated, glancing at his phone. A message from Kukui lit up the screen, inviting him to the dining hall. He quickly typed out a reply that declined Yuki’s offer with an apologetic shrug.

Kei stepped into the dining hall. The scent of freshly baked bread and steaming miso soup filling the air. The hall stretched out before him, its vaulted ceiling adorned with intricate carvings that twisted in the chandelier light. The warm glow of golden accents contrasted with the murmur of voices, the silence occasionally broken by bursts of laughter.

Toward the back of the hall, Kukui waved at him with a faint smile, her hand a quick motion in the sea of students. Kei wove through the tables, the polished floor pressing into the earth slightly under his steps.

“You made it,” Kukui said as he reached her table, her voice light but not entirely cheerful.

Three girls sat with her, their gazes shifting to Kei as he approached. Their eyes sparkled with a mix of curiosity and mischief, and one of them nudged Kukui with her elbow.

“So, this is the Kei you’ve been talking about?” the first girl asked, her tone teasing as she leaned forward. Her hair was dyed a vibrant red, tied back in a messy bun, and her smile was sharp enough to cut.

Kukui rolled her eyes. “Barely.”

“He’s cute,” the second girl said, her smirk widening as she rested her chin on her palm. Her long braids framed her face, and her eyes gleamed behind round glasses.

Kei felt his face heat up, and he adjusted his glasses nervously. “Um, hi.”

The third girl leaned back in her chair, her arms crossed as she gave Kei a once-over. “Didn’t know you had such a popular friend, Kukui.”

“Leave him alone,” Kukui said, her tone exasperated but tinged with amusement. She gestured for Kei to sit, brushing her hair over her shoulder as she glanced at him.

The girls didn’t relent, they questioned Kei the moment he sat down.

“Do you play any instruments?”

“What do you do for fun?”

“Are you good at sports?”

“Wait, you’re on the student council, right? What’s that like?”

The questions came rapid-fire, their energy overwhelming. Kei struggled to keep up. He answered as best he could, his responses clipped and awkward, but his mind kept drifting to Marin. Then one of them asked, “So, have you met the Vice President yet?”

Kei froze. His fingers gripped the edge of the table. “Uh…yeah. I have.”

The girl’s eyes widened. “What’s she like? I heard she’s absolutely gorgeous.”

“She is,” another chimed in, her voice dreamy. “Like a model or something.”

Kei’s throat felt tight. He couldn’t think. His thoughts tripped over each other. “She’s…um…”

“Enough,” Kukui snapped, her voice cutting through the chatter like a blade. She leaned forward and dug her fists into the table. “Stop talking about her.”

The sudden shift in her tone silenced the group. The girls exchanged uneasy glances before returning to their food, their curiosity dulled by Kukui’s obvious frustration.

Kei looked at her, his brow furrowed. “Kukui?”

She didn’t meet his gaze, her shoulders stiff as she pushed her chair back and stood abruptly. “I need some air.”

Without another word, she walked toward the doors, her steps quick and deliberate. Kei hesitated before following her, the murmurs of the dining hall fading as he stepped into the corridor.

Kukui was leaning against the wall outside, her arms crossed tightly over her chest. She didn’t look at him as he approached, her gaze fixed on the tiled floor.

“You’ve changed,” she said quietly, her voice trembling with barely contained emotion.

Kei stopped a few feet away, his stomach twisting. “What do you mean?”

Kukui let out a bitter laugh, shaking her head. “You know exactly what I mean.” She finally looked at him, her eyes glistening. “Every time I see you, all I see in your eyes is her—him—whatever this... performance is supposed to be. Marin. The way you look at her, the way you talk about her—about him…It’s like you’ve forgotten everything.”

“That’s not true,” Kei said, but his voice lacked conviction.

“Isn’t it?” Kukui stepped closer, her gaze piercing. “You’re letting him consume you, Kei. You’re forgetting Sugei. Forgetting the real Marin. You’re letting him rewrite everything.”

Kei’s jaw tightened, his fists clenching at his sides. “You don’t understand—”

“No, you don’t understand!” Kukui’s voice cracked, her frustration spilling over. “She’s gone, Kei. Marin is gone. And Sugei…Sugei isn’t her. No matter how much you want him to be.”

Kei’s breath hitched, her words hitting him like a physical blow. He opened his mouth to respond, but nothing came.

Kukui shook her head, tears slipping down her cheeks. “Wake up, Kei,” she whispered, her voice breaking. “Before you lose yourself completely.”

She turned and walked away, her footsteps echoing in the empty corridor. Kei stood frozen, his mind a whirlwind of emotions he couldn’t untangle.

As he began to wander the halls, the faint sound of a piano reached his ears. The melody was soft at first, a fragile thread of sound that grew stronger with each step. It was haunting, the kind of music that clung to the edges of your thoughts and refused to let go.

Kei followed the sound to the music room, his hand hovering over the doorknob. He pushed the door open slowly, the hinges creaking as the room came into view.

Marin sat at the grand piano, her back to him, her fingers gliding effortlessly over the keys. The flickering light from the chandeliers cast shifting shadows across the room, the golden accents of the piano gleaming faintly.

The melody twisted and turned, its mournful notes sinking into Kei’s chest. Marin’s movements were fluid, her body swaying gently with the rhythm. Her long, dark hair fell over her shoulders like silk, glossy in the chandelier glow. 

Kei stepped inside, his breath shallow as he watched her. Each note felt like a whisper, a secret spoken only to the silence. The music wrapped around him, pulling him deeper into the moment.

Marin’s hands slowed, the final note lingering in the air before fading into silence. She turned her head slightly, catching sight of him out of the corner of her eye.

“You shouldn’t sneak up on people,” she said softly, her voice carrying the faintest hint of a smile.

Kei didn’t respond, his eyes fixed on her. The way she sat, the way she looked at him—it was Sugei, and it wasn’t. Marin shifted on the bench, he tapped a few notes, absentminded.. “It’s a beautiful instrument, isn’t it?”

Kei nodded slowly, his throat tight.

Marin’s gaze drifted to the piano, her expression unreadable. “This was her favorite piece,” she murmured. “She used to play it when she couldn’t sleep.”

She played something quieter. Gentler. Kei stood frozen in the doorway, the music pulling him deeper into the shadows of his own mind.

Kei lingered in the doorway long after the last note had faded, his eyes fixed on her silhouette against the golden glow of the chandeliers. He told himself to move, to leave, to turn his back before this feeling rooted itself any deeper. But his feet refused. His chest ached with the awful pull of her presence, a current he despised himself for drifting into.

Why am I letting this happen? The thought seared through him, sharp and merciless. Why can’t I stop?

He clenched his fists at his sides, nails digging into his palms, but it did nothing to sever the invisible thread binding his gaze to her. Every part of him screamed that this was wrong—that it wasn’t her, could never be her—but still he looked. Still he lingered.

He hated himself for it, for the quiet thrill that coursed through him simply watching the curve of her hand against the keys, the turn of her head in the dim light. It was sick, it was shameful, it was everything he swore he would never allow. And yet he stayed, drowning slowly in the hollow comfort of her shadow, unable to pull free.

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Tikaya
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Tikaya wrote a review Review · Jan 19

Good morning! Nothing better than reading a chapter of Eternal Beauty first thing :3

And another poignant quote, huh?

Love this description: “as if she were carving her words into stone“

I kinda wish we would have gotten a better glimpse into their normal lessons. This is the first time I hear that Kukui usually gives sly commentary.
It also kinda feels like the two barely made any connections outside of themselves which is sad. I hope they get to talk to ppl other than Marin and Yuki. I also hope we get to meet more council members!

It kinda feels weird to hear you describe the bell like this, right now. Surely Kei’s heard it countless times before now but the description makes it seem so novel?

Oh man hearing Kei describe the difference between Marin and Sugei… It has me in two minds. It feels like Sugei extinguished himself to become Marin. And also as if… Marin used to be a ghost and now, Sugei cannot cope with his previous energy/personality and so no wonder he copied someone who was like a ghost from the beginning?

The reminder that crazy science girl exists also has me remember that I don’t know who the actual president of the council is. You bring up the description of Mrs Hawkthorne every chapter she’s in but you don’t remind ppl who the actual president is? =D

Also I don’t think I like Yuta. She’s too much of a stereotype to me and I also don’t get the feeling she talks more than the most basic, surface-level science to sell that she’s smart.

He quickly typed out a reply that declined Yuki’s offer with an apologetic shrug.
Isn’t he in the room with Yuki? Why would he need to type a reply to decline? oô

Okay, it seems that at least Kukui is making friends 😊
Aww I like how you describe Kei blushing :3

Oh jee, so the topic of Marin never came up with her new friends? Poor Kukui. I guess she’s usually better at steering the conversation elsewhere. Also, isn’t she on the council as well?

I must agree with Kukui here. I wish you’d give a better time frame. How much time has passed etc to really see how quickly Marin’s consuming Kei here.

I really like the vagueness and the actually improbable way new-Marin is handled. I don’t mind that there should be legal troubles and other hurdles that Sugei should not have that easily overcome. But it doesn’t really matter for this story. It would be nice if you explained that but it doesn’t have to. Because that’s not what this story is about. It feels extremely manga-esque. As if I could pick up this story and read it somewhere, with pictures and stuff. You capture that vibe really well, alongside some really neat descriptions that I wish I could do even half as good as you do it here.

“a current he despised himself for drifting into.“ That is interesting to know. So far we haven’t really gotten any reflection from Kei about how he should feel about HIMSELF believing the fabrication of new-Marin. Just reflections on how he feels about HER.

I still believe this is partly because he could have fallen in love with Sugei, so it’s not necessarily Marin but this… amalgamation of the two that is so irresistible.

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Messenger wrote a review Review · Sep 12, 2025

Agh. Looks like cat beat me this time. Oh well. Carry on we must

as though the weight of the unspoken clung to the corners unmoving, as though trapped in the walls.

Repetition of "as though" in the same sentence.

lavender that clung to her skin. It made him sick to his stomach, this awful, creepy sense of attraction to someone he knew wasn’t entirely her.

Wasn't entirely? Doesnt he mean not at all??

declining Yuki’s offer with an apologetic shrug.

Not overly confusing, but i feel that replacing "declining" with declined would make a stronger distinction that this is a separate act to replying to Kukui who he presumably said yes to meeting in the dining hall.

Kei wove through the tables, the polished floor creaking faintly under his steps.

Would he even be able to hear the creak with the "sea of students"?

The questions came rapid-fire, their energy overwhelming

You just said he was peppered with questions and then wrote several specific ones out in a row, so this feels repetitive and unnecessary.

whatever this... performance is supposed to be.” Marin.

Accidental quotation mark here.

She played something quieter. Gentler. Kei stood frozen in the doorway, the music pulling him deeper into the shadows of his own mind.

Acck this is where the chapter ends? Kinda feels like a cutoff in the middle of a scene, and im really wishing to see more discussion. Obviously if you do it all at once you loae tension and your story is over too fast, but I guess im struggling.to understand why Kei is so given in to Sugei's performance, especially if he was romantically to Marin.
There is obviously the idea that because he looks like her there is this weird fatal attraction which you did touch on briefly in this chapter, but it seems like Kei would try to resist it at first.
I did like that Kukui finally called him out, but Kei being dead silent in all of these conversations is making it really hard to root for him or be interested in how he's feeling if he won't engage in discussion or arguments or with his classmates.

~Messy

RatHat replied · Sep 12, 2025

Hi Messy!! Its great to always hear from you.

I did fix many of the things you suggested in this chapter. And I added more at the end, I can definitely understand your comment on Kei being too passive and not enough discussion. In the chapters between 11 and 14 I definitely do have more of Kei and his view on Sugei so I hope that is what you are referring to.

You have been a very helpful guide for me Messy, without you or Cats I would have missed so many things within my own writing. Thank you!

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velvetcatsz wrote a review Review · Sep 12, 2025

Hello! It's CATS here to review the newest chapter of Eternal Beauty. I love the name you gave it, by the way. I have loved it so far. Let's dive in!
The quote really describes how much change Sugei, Kei, and Kukui has been through, especially Sugei. Maybe it is foreshadowing, maybe it is returning to the past. Anyways, I just really loved it. Let's continue reading!
Wow, I assume they are in history class. I love the descriptions of Kei's glasses and the window. Very clear!
I would also feel so embarrassed if my teacher called me out like that! Actually...I've been through that a lot. But Kei should be proud of himself.
I wish we knew more about how Sugei was like, his personality, before he decided to transform into Marin, his sister.
Oop...Yuta and Yuki sound so similar. Although, like the creativity of them arguing.
I love how the girls are crushing on Kei. It's so reality lol. I would too probably!
Ah, how easily the fun and games were broken into arguing between Kei and Kukui, tension rebuilding. That's just sad, how the heartwarming moment was snapped out.
Where did Sugei grow long hair? Is it a wig? He couldn't have been too long ago when his hair was short! I wonder...
I love playing piano. It's so fun to let out your emotions, your pain, your sadness, your anger. Sugei's memories of Marin are clear.
The ending is really captivating and engaging, and I love it.
OVERALL: I really loved the chapter. It is full of emotions and memories. I can't wait to hear what happens next. And hahah, I beat Messy!!
Happy Reading, Happy RevMo, and Happy Writing!
Love,
CATS



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