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That was a very interesting poem, and definitely in a good way. I loved the double- meaning of smoke, as well as how you used the structure of the poem itself to further the poem and its message. I really liked how you used the almost forced rhyming to reinforce the message, as well as having a short, to-the-point poem, which has 'no smoke' or extra words. However, I find the rhyme scheme somewhat confusing. It looks like its in an AABCDCEA pattern, which makes no sense to me. It's like you couldn't make up your mind on the rhyme scheme. But it was still a good poem overall, though.
Poetry is not my expertise, but the rhyming here feels a bit forced. Try to find a way to make the rhyming more organic if possible.