Young Writers Society

Hey. This is Nike. And you've just met one of the Doctor Who fans *me*. I don't read poems, but when I got onto the club Doctor Who, someone mentioned this so I decided to check it out. Like I said, I don't do poems. But since it's about Doctor Who, I'll give it a try.

I loved it.

There were no spelling mistakes or grammar mistakes. I enjoyed reading this piece. The man who forgets, Ten, David Tennant. This was a nice way of talking about how he felt in this situation and how they saved Gallifrey.

I felt like though that I was reading the script. So that means you didn't change a lot from what they said. And it didn't feel much like a poem in that way.

Really great. I'll be reading more from you!

- Nike

Hey, back to review this fantastic piece of poetry.
So, I really liked this, personally I don't think it was as good as 'No more' but it is still good regardless.
You have managed to talk about the 10th Doctors story in the 50th. Whilst you could have gone into detail a little bit more, it is still good.

One thing that I commented on in your other poems is the use of punctuation.
I understand that you don't like using periods and such, which is fine. It just means that you need to construct the lines in such a way that readers know when to pause, or when the line runs on.

Anyway, this is still really good, and whilst I think you could have captured more of 10s feelings and emotions, especially after they save Gallifrey and he knows he isn't going to remember saving all the children.

Good job and I can't wait to read about 11.
Nargles xx

I have never seen Doctor Who, so I don't entirely understand this, but I think it was fantastic. I see no need to use periods simply because you capitalize each line.
In poetry, punctuation seems to perform a different function than in prose. Flow is important in all writing, but even more so in poetry, and using a period or other punctuation can completely change it. Even capitalizing a letter can change the flow or feeling of a poem, and I capitalize lines depending on what I want to express. The breaking of the lines can serve as the pause the comma or period would make.
I personally would have chosen to put a period at the last line of this poem, but I think that it is personal choice.

I wish I knew more of Doctor Who so I could review this, but as far as my current understanding goes, I love it. I think the flow is wonderful, and I can feel the emotion in it. Emotion is very important to me; I feel as though I am very attuned to it, and it's a very important part of poetry to me. Well done.

You have done well, but you definatly need to pick up on punctuation and capitals.

Hey, I don't have time to review this now, but I will later.
It is very good!:)

Ha. Wow! This makes me want to watch the 50th anniversary episode again .

This is different.
The good different, of course.
I like it, like...a lot.
Although, I think it was kind of makes me want to read more.
It's still really good, though.
I believe that you have great writing skills.
:3