I'm not just a body that walks the earth,
nor just a body that attends,
the occasional wedding.
I am not just a body that enjoys,
the carnal pleasures of life.
as if every memory and experience isn't precious.
I am a mind, a heart, and a soul,
identified as a body.
but I am more than that.
I am more than an observer,
I am a witness to the cruel and unusual punishments,
in a corrupt world of hate.
I am a soul survivor of betrayal.
I am headstrong but I am human,
so at times I am proven wrong.
I am not just a body that leaks tears,
or releases words of anger,
I am a conscious being. I am alive.
I am strong. As strong as,
any unbreakable bond.
I am the sun, secluded behind dark skies,
a lonely moon that can light up a broken city.
I am a shape, in a large space,
full of many other shapes,
but still, I am more than that.
I have made my share of mistakes,
and I regret them all,
because some have caused me too,
lose nearly everything,
and some just left a bad memory behind.
That same person,
who has made all those mistakes,
wishes she could take it all back.
But she can't.
I may look like a mind full of shame,
and a heart full of sorrow,
but I not, I am more than that.
I am a strong warrior,
ready to overcome any obstacle,
and knock down any barrier.
I am not just a body,
I am a lesson to be learned.
an example for those who still capture,
the essence of innocence.
Those sheltered from the real world,
and all its demons.
I am me, is that good enough for you?
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Wow I really liked this!! Everything ran together smoothly and you had marvelous word choice! It was just wonderful!! I liked how you put this.
"I am more than an observer,
I am a witness to the cruel and unusual punishments,
in a corrupt world of hate."
I am also this way too and everything you said in this poem are what I can relate to too. You did an awesome job!!! I love the poem!!
Thank you so much!! I am so glad you liked it!!
The poem is wonderful. I like how it explains how people aren't just bodies here on earth. They are people like you and I. Wish I could write poems like you...Sadly I am only a story person. I've never been great at poems, nor good at them ^^' I hope to see more that are wonderfully written like this one. ^-^ So far this is my favorite poem~ Keep it up!
Thank you so much! and I am sure you are a great story writer I will have to check some out soon!
I was captivated by this poem, it is just utterly brilliant! I like how you repeat the line:
"I am not just a body"
Over and over again throughout the poem. I also like how you site all the things you ar: a soul, a lesson, a shape, a warrior...
In the line: " I may look like a mind full or shame" I think this is typo error and that it should be 'of' instead of 'or'. In all I think this is a lovely poem and is very deep and insightful.
Thanks so much for pointing that out Maia I am going to change that error! i am glad you liked it
First of all, I just have to say that I love this! It's probably one of the best poems I've read on this website so far (and I have read quite a few c:) I quite enjoyed reading it and I honestly think you have talent.
However, I did find a couple of mistakes that I think would improve this piece if corrected. The first one was when you wrote 'I have make my share of mistakes' Instead of make, use made, it would make more sense
There was also another that I found, though I'm not sure of it, you wrote 'I may look like a mind full or shame' I think you were supposed to type of? But correct me if I'm wrong, haha.
There was also another line, 'Because some have caused me nearly everything,' It wasn't really a mistake, I just think you should use the word cost instead of caused.
Other than that I think this was a wonderful piece and I'm looking forward to reading more of your work. Good luck with your writing
Thank you so much! i did mean to tpye made instead of make! lol. and i meant of not or, thank you so much i appreciate the review and I'm glad you liked it!