This small suburb,
is not enough.
Not anymore.
Was it ever enough?
I don't know,
but it's not anymore.
It is not enough,
to step outside my home and see,
the same old houses,
the same old trees.
I want to go where the lights shine bright,
above the darkest crimes.
The home of Broadway,
And the New York Times.
Nothing compares,
to the rush you feel,
when you see you name in lights,
and know it's real.
My small town was once enough,
but not anymore,
its time for me to spread my wings,
take a leap and soar.
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I love this. It's so inspiring. I can definitely relate to it. I love the energy and the dreaming behind it all. There isn't much rhythm to it, but the repetition makes up for everything. There are parts that do rhyme and other parts that don't and that's distracting. You capitalized "And" at the end of the third stanza. I'm not sure if it's intentional or not, but it seems a little out of place. Other than that there aren't any major issues. It's a good poem and I enjoy it immensely.
Thank you so much! I didn't even notice the capitalized "And" thanks so much for pointing that out!
Sphealwithit here, happy days filled with reviews.
I really like this poem, the main reason being that I know that feel bro. Anyway.... I like the rhyme scheme it's really unusal. The rythm is good too. The whole bird theme is different (which isn't bad) it fits really well.
Keep up the good work.
Sphealwithit out...
Thanks so much for the great review!
review here... here is a review well done
tell you what you did good just need a little more time to get it all started
got to start some where i guess we all do
anyways keep it up and remember to always have fun....
thanks Dragon......
remember to check my story's out
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Panda here to do you a review.
I absolutely like the poem. You give great imagery of the places the bird sees. I like that you do rhyming and you make it fit well. There isn't any grammar mistakes, which that is amazing because grammar mistakes aren't hard to make. My favorite part is stanza 3, all of it. I see you aren't a very old member at all so you must really like poetry because you seem like you got it down packed. Personally poetry is hard for me today so thumbs up for you. Anyways, keep up the good writing!
-panda
Thank you so much! I do love poetry, I've been writing it for as long as i can remember! I am thrilled that you like it! and thanks for the great review!
Your welcome
and yes I can tell you love poetry! < 3