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by MandaPanda1031

Published April 18, 2011

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Haylie
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Haylie wrote a review Review · Apr 18, 2011

Wow i actually loved this :')
You're really good. How old are you?
Your grammar is almost perfect. Apart from missing a couple of comma's out
Like.
Gone, off into the sky (,) never to return.
The bell rang(,) just as Anna shut the door.

Overall i really like it.
Keep on writing!
I'll read the rest of your work and keep an eye out for your work :')



Every really new idea looks crazy at first.
— Alfred North Whitehead