My Love Is Like A Beautiful Garden

Aww, that was so adorable.

I'm trying to figure out what dialect you're exactly using, cause it seems to be a mix of shakespeare, traditional, and something along the lines of a Japanese sonnet

The wording though, may just be a slight issue here. Some people won't understand some of the words, for instance, I had to look at the word wreathes a few times cause I didn't compute exactly what it said (and now that I have, I feel dumb, cause that shouldn't of been something I didn't follow correctly)

The idea behind this is very simple, though in the wording you give, you lay a beautiful scene of love and devotion out before us that girls my age just love to eat up

Keep writing, I like this one
~Maddie

I thought this was an interesting poem! You did very well with imagery, and the theme with which you started off with - how love is garden - is so vividly conveyed throughout the rest of the poem. I enjoyed the historical style with which you wrote. I think this was my favorite line - "and the rhythm in which her flowers sway". It pictures so much - not just the movement of the flowers, but also the movement of the wind, the tempo of nature, as well as the rhythm of the poem.

Like others have said, a good poem doesn't necessarily have to rhyme. I think you could convey a lot more depth with a freeverse style, that way you're not always focusing on which word rhymes with which. Although the descriptions aren't textbook cliche, I feel as though the material itself is shallow. Does he only love her for her beauty? What else draws him to her? Including those thoughts will define the love he has for her more uniquely.

Hello there Leo! I'm here to save your work from the green room!
This is a really beautiful love poem.
I like your use of flowery language, as it is a flowery poem. Unfortunately, in some places I feel like you were unsuccessful in the way the sentence is laid out. For example the very last line "And she smiles, and his arms do her now wreathes..." I think the confusion of this sentence could be alleviated a bit by changing the "wreathes" to just "wreath."
It would read "and she smiles, and his arms now wreathe her."
What I'm trying to say, and I don't think I'm making it clear, is that these lines aren't clear. And I know that's for the sake of rhyming and for the sake of sounding nice and flowery.
To me, this poem, although beautiful and skillfully written, is just a fluff poem. I would love to see some sort of meaning in this but I don't know how to tell you to change the whole poem.
For what it is, it's pretty good. you obviously have skill
keep writing~
Fortis

Hi, I'm Hightop, and firstly, a warm welcome to YWS (I'll be at your wall shortly!) xD, now on to reviewing!

Firstly, I noticed a lack of capitalization and punctuation, but I'm assuming that's a stylistic choice on your part.

Secondly, paragraphs. Again this may be another stylistic choice, but I think they would befit the poem greatly! Although that's my opinion.

On rhyming scheme, again another stylistic choice that I'm not a fan off (for a legitimate reason thus time O_O). Rhyming schemes will always, without a doubt, limit your wordpool. Usually this ends with the poem suffering. Freeverse poetry let's you swim in an infinite wordpool that let's you say things however you want!

Those are just stylist choices, which have very little to do with my overall opinion if the poem, which is to say that I liked it!

Your subject was clear and your descriptions were good. Word choice was good ( considering your limited woordpool) and it flowed nicely.

One last thing, I don't think 'sprayed' is the best word to describe how a flower portrays its scent.

Okay, so well done, the only problems I had with it vary from person to person, remember that!

Signing off, (and hoping you don't get offended!)
Hightop