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Alright so I've become a tortoise which means I'm supposed to write a review today and this is the piece I chose at random to review!
Except I'm going to have to choose another as I honestly have nothing bad to say about this. I especially love 'thistle bright' and the consonance of shall and shadow is just beautiful. The touch of humour at the end, the structure, all of it works really well together.
My apologies for making this the third comment you've received but chin up, that means you're doing something right <33
Beautiful. Then we have the bit on the camera. I'm not sure if it was meant to be humor (probably), but it made me grin like a loon. It's plain funny.
Congrats if that was your intention. Or not. You got the reader to react, so it's still art.
-also a comment-
This is just a comment, since I don't have a particular critique here.
Only you could write this beautiful piece and end it with "please bring your camera."
Not only 'lorry, but it /is/ proof that lorry's good. ;P