I bask in the fact you came forward and simply put, '' Tear it apart if you want. '' That shows a certain faith and dignity that is difficult to come by. I loved how at the end of every stanza, you put a question, usually the title's question. Poetry is a way of expression, and I think you expressed something here today that was straight forward, but had meaning. The only thing I would change, is the fact that is sounded more like you almost wanted to scream what you wrote, and not really using a poetic rhythm. Poetry is about being indirect, making your reader think for a moment, making your reader reread again the witty and wise words. But other than that, I really like what you have going for you here. I hope to see more work by you in the future!
Points: 345
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