The oceans are raging,
the tea-kettles chanting,
"Off with her head!"
"Off with her head!"
~*~*~*~*~*
The White Queen is weeping,
the Mad Hatter singing,
"Off with her head!"
"Off with her head!"
~*~*~*~*~*
My own sick Wonderland,
is coming to life.
Where blood covers the streets,
and insanity is nigh.
~*~*~*~*~*
For none are safe in my Wonderland,
because the Red Queen has risen.
Taking with her,
the souls of the damned.
~*~*~*~*~*
So for the time being,
while Alice is hanging.
They will be singing,
"Off with her head!"
"Off with her head!"
~*~*~*~*~*
And I'll just keep weeping.
for my voice is ringing,
"Off with my head!"
"Off with my head!"
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This is the first I have on this site so far, being I joined today, but I think it's marvelous! I found it very creative. I haven't much to say about this piece merely because I cannot think of what to say! Bravo!
This is the first I have on this site so far, being I joined today, but I think it's marvelous! I found it very creative. I haven't much to say about this piece merely because I cannot think of what to say! Bravo!
Hey dankmemelord here!
First things first, I love Alice in Wonderland!
This poem is wonderful. I found no corrections. You used a lot of literary devices such as imagery and repetition. It had a good rhythm. I also liked that you used punctuation which is not something I see often on this website. My favorite line was " The White Queen is weeping, the Mad Hatter singing,"Off with her head!""Off with her head!"
Overall, I loved your poem! I can't wait to read and review more of your work!
Goodbye, have a nice day!
- Dankmemelord
Hey JustOneMorePoem! It's AshleyDashley here for a review!
First off I love Alice in Wonderland. It was cool to go though it, but yet this had a different meaning. At the end you say,
This describes your feelings pretty clearly. I feel for you and if you ever need to talk I'll listen. I see no grammar errors or punctuation errors so fabulous job on that! Overall I think that this poem was marvelous! You did a good job with the flow because it kept me reading and also the poem was not confusing. I got a good visual as I read this too. Magnificent job and keep up the great work and I hope to read more of your work in the future!
AshleyDashley
Alice in Wonderland has always been a part of me while growing up. So, for sailing me through your wonderland, I'd like to thank you. It was amazing.