I love how this is structured! The line breaks have the perfect effect on the reader to make them pause for just a second before moving on, which allows the reader to truly process the line. However, because I'm a stickler for grammar, I think you used the plural form of galaxy instead of the possessive. I think you were looking for "galaxy's" or "galaxies'." I loved the poem overall though! Great work!
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