Hey there, JaylinBoykins !!
This is Eros here witha a review for you !
First of all the title was catchy and erotic. I loved the way you have described all those cascade of incidents and events happening here starting from a passionate kiss.
I like how you have expressed the feelings and passion.
The way you have presented the poem is indeed very good. I like the smooth flow of the poem. It makes the rreader to want to read more and more and dive into the thoughts ...
The poem was very deep and I liked how you have used the words.
While writing a piece of poetry or short story, it is the most important aspect to choose the perfect set of words. It depends on the genre and type of the story or poem.
And the words that you have chooses, perfectly matched with the romantic genre. I loved this part here.
Apart from that, every writer has a unique style of writing. You have a simple style of writing and the language you have used is easy to understand. It is better when you use simple style of writing while expressing yourself on deep topics. And you have done the same.
I don't mean to say that you should never use decorative style of writing. By decorative writing style, I mean, using a somewhat difficult language, using new words and All. This style us also unique in itself.
Overall I love this piece of poetry and it was filled with romance.
Great work !
Keep writing such awesome stuff !
We would love to keep reading them ...
Have a great day/ night !
~Eros.
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