Where were you when the planes hit?
Could you see through all of the smoke and ash?
Could you hear over the screams and yells?
Could you stand through all the pain and anguish all around?
Did you call your loved ones to see if they were OK?
Or did you run into a burning building and save a life?
Where were you when the towers fell?
Could you breath with all of the dirt and debris in the air?
Could you walk through all of the rubble?
Could you stare at all of the destruction and not flinch
Did you turn away and pretend this wasn't happening?
Or did you kneel down and pray for help?
Where were you when the war began?
Could you cheer when so many had died?
Could you wait for ten years as it dragged on?
Could you keep silent when so much money had been spent?
Did you complain about everything being Bush's fault?
Or did you praise out men and women for our defending liberty?
Did you pray this morning for all of the soldiers overseas?
Or have you forgotten?
I feel really strongly about this and everyday I pray that we will win this war. Not pull our troops out or pack up and go home, not until we can say that those who died on 9/11 have been avenged, not until this is over. And so I pray, everyday for those overseas and the families that lost someone... because if my dad hadn't missed his flight in Boston, he would've been there too.
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This was a truly beautiful poem. I loved the perspective. Like someone above said, the different approaches of 9/11 made it all the more touching. I loved the format as well. I think that second person adds depth to the poem don't you agree? Asking questions in poetry gives the reader a chance to really ponder the topic. I tend to do the same in my work. Anyways, it was a beautiful piece of work. THis was my favorite line by the way,
and I thought the last stanza was great as well. Great job.
Love, fruity
This, was absolutely touching. I've been thinking a lot about 9/11 lately, for numerous reasons - not that I've lost anyone, but I think i'm just more aware.
"Did you pray this morning for all of the soldiers overseas?
Or have you forgotten?"
Amazing. I'll be honest, looking back and looking through it again, I was hoping for a little more/tougher/grittier build to this. I think it could have further brought the audience to tears, but as it is... It's just already amazing.
But if you're looking for a bit more of a critical, technical comment:
I have none. lol Not for this, anyway. I'm not so well-versed in writing poetry, but I love to read and dissect it.
Anyway, this poem in general was quite heartfelt; I won't forget 9/11.
I really like this, it was moving, telling you the different approaches people took and take to the 9/11 attack.
The:
"Pray for the soldiers" vs. "Bring them home"
"Help someone" vs. "Make sure your family is safe"
"Do nothing and gawk" vs. "Pretend nothing happened."
I really do like this, though I must say I disagree with you on the keeping our soldiers longer bit... I think we should bring them home, the war is over, and so we should move on. You can't walk forward if you're looking behind you that’s how you bump into poles. But I digress. The poem was very good and well written I enjoyed it and like what you did. Keep up the great work. 4 owls out of 5.
~ Owl