Nothing to wear

Hey there! clogs here to review!

I'm just gonna jump right in and say that I think the humor in this poem would be brought out a lot more if you used punctuation more effectively. For me, at least, a lot of the humor depends on imagining the narrator's inflection and disgust as they're reading the poem, but I don't really feel that being expressed without the punctuation. It makes the voice in my head read the poem in a monotone, which is kind of dull. I recommend going through this and adding punctuation to make this more like a narrative. For example,

How did this skirt

Get so covered in dirt

Knitted wool

Is too casual

The first two lines are phrased like a question, so add a question mark at the end! The punctuation for the next two lines could be a number of things, but go with what you feel best expresses how the narrator would read this. I'm definitely getting a sense of the speaker's personality, but I think that punctuation would really bring it out more, so work on that! Punctuation is a stylistic choice in poetry, but in this case, I think adding punctuation would help a lot.

I also think this could use some sort of division? It kind of runs on and on, so I think that dividing it into stanzas might be more visually appealing and more organized. I'm not sure where you would divide it up, but I think some sort of organization might help. You could try every four lines, or maybe every eight lines. If you're having difficulties with the YWS publisher taking away stanzas, then you can either hit "shift" and "enter" at the same time when making new lines in the publisher, or put some sort of minor punctuation like "--" or "~" to keep the stanzas separate.

I'd also like to talk about rhythm a little bit. This poem definitely depends a lot on consistent rhyme and rhythm for its humor, and while you did a pretty good job with these things, there were times where the rhythm had too many syllables or where the rhyme seemed a little forced. In a poem that relies so heavily on these things, it's good to make sure that you're being spot-on about good rhythm and rhyme. Read the poem out loud to yourself, and if something sounds forced, then change it! For instance, I thought that the line "it is such a rag" was odd because "it is" isn't a phrase that we generally use in casual speech. That could easily be changed to something like "it's nothing but a rag" so it would be rhythmically better and still rhyme with the previous line. Don't be afraid to rephrase things and play with the poem! Writing structured poems like this can be fun, but they can also be tricky, so just make sure everything is on point so you can maximize the humor.

Watch minor grammar things, too-- if you're trying to say something like "hoodie is in the wash" and putting "hoodie" and "is" together in a contraction, it requires an apostrophe. Correctly spelled, it would be "hoodie's in the wash". There are a couple of instances where you forget that apostrophe, so make sure you proofread this.

There's not really a whole lot to say about content. This clearly isn't meant to be anything more than humorous and relatable, and it succeeds in both those respects. I think the biggest thing to work on is presentation of the content (punctuation, rhythm, etc.).

Overall, this was an enjoyable poem! I hope this review helped, and keep up the good work!

Hey! Here for a review.

This is a clever poem which is very relatable. I'm just going to jump write in with it!

First line,

Wardrobe is full and I've nothing to wear

, I do get what you're saying, but the way you put the words is uncomfortable to read. Maybe adding a "got" in between the I've and Nothing.

Another thing that would add to the poem would be stanzas. The rhyme is great but I would recommend stanzas with each two lines of rhyme or something like that.

I am also going to say that punctuation would probably also help.

Mismatched socks

Smelly tops

Tights have holes

In these three lines commas after each line would help with the listing of the clothes, it would create a better flow. This also goes for a couple other places in the poem. I do understand that a new line would be like a replacement. But all in all, I believe that more punctuation would help.

In this last line,

And I'm going to lose my Flight

I don't quite understand why the "flight" is capitalized. Unless it were a proper noun addressing something named "Flight", I would put that in lowercase.

Overall, this is a great poem and I wish you the best of luck on your new poems!