It took a while for Rosalie to crack open her eyes to the light. The world has 30,000 shades of white, and Rosalie had seen them all, it was still not enough to understand the complexity of the color she was looking at. It wasn't white, but it was. It was the only way her brain could define and pinpoint where she was. However, she had no idea.
Rosalie sat in the 30,000 shades of white. She looked at the floor, or was it a floor. Was it just nothing? Had her brain configured this place up to relax her? What did it matter anyway? She was nowhere, she was nothing.
Rosalie stood in the 30, 000 shades of white. Could she really be standing, or was this surreal? Like everything else in this room. Was this even a room? There was no end, no stop sign. No normalcy.
Rosalie ran in the 30, 000 shades of white. She ran on, and on, and on. She never tried, her body never slowed, her breathing never quickened. Her heart stayed a stable beating of 70 beats per minute.
Rosalie cried in the 30,000 shades of white. Her tears were wet, but she could not feel it. Her tears dropped and disappeared as if they had never existed. As if she had never existed.
Rosalie was sick in the 30, 000 shades of white. She couldn't feel it, not in her bones. Not the normal shaky feeling you get when your body is in pain. She didn't will it to stop, since it never came.
Rosalie hit herself in the 30, 000 shades of white. Yet nothing was to be felt, just a numbness of the person she once was.
Rosalie clawed at herself in the 30, 000 shades of white. She opened herself, but she bled white air. Was she human? Was she a monster?
Rosalie became blind in the 30,000 shades of white. She could see nothing, nothing but light. Too much light. She prayed for darkness, but the stars never appeared.
Rosalie waited in the 30,000 shades of white. She could achieve nothing on her own. She was trapped in white, like an unopened birthday present.
Rosalie fell asleep for the first time in the 30, 000 shades of white. She dreamed of the moon.
Rosalie awoke in the 30,000 shades of black. She smiled in the darkness. She had been granted her gift.
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Heyy!! Forever here with a tiny review!!
You have a really good short story here. I liked how you managed to give us a hint that thid 30000 shades of white were actually light of different colours. I could understand it because one can never actually see 30000 shades of white in a palette or even if one can, that doesn't fit into the story.
Seems like you wanted to create an illusion of the environment around Rosalie. Like we see everything light wants us to see and we don't see every that light doesn't want us to see. Rosalie tries to guess the absolute truth in the story instead of the relative truth. Something which I wonder about is what you actually tried to mean by she never got physically tired? I guess it was due to the imaginary nature of Rosalie.
I also wonder about what you meant by she felt asleep for the first time in the 30000 shades of white. She never fell asleep in her whole life time before? I don't know but it feels a bit unrealistic. Please clarify this a bit. And is the end a happy ending or a sad ending? It doesn't seem to be a veey happy one and for some unknown reason I have a feeling thst Rosalie went blind.
This is just a suggestion but you cam use anonymous she in this story. It will add to the mysterious feeling of the story.
Keep Writing!!
~Forever
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Oh wow! It's amazing how you can capture the complete feeling of nothing and being alone. 30,000 shades of white would be a nightmare to live in! Good job, and keep the creative idea's flowing