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draining reflections from a deep sink

by EllieMae, KateHardy, ScarlettFire, Spearmint, WeepingWisteria



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EllieMae says...



Green-> @Spearmint
Purple-> @EllieMae
Red-> @ScarlettFire
Turquoise-> @KateHardy
Blue/gray-> @WeepingWisteria

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Spoiler! :
draining reflections from a deep sink

light blurs off my metal; it curves through water
all the way down to the lonely place no one has ever ventured before.
nothing reveals my deepest depths where secrets lay forgotten and
scraps of food are swirled down to their eternal repose.
perhaps the depths of my corpse reflect the depths of my sorrows,
water comes in endless swirls but it never washes it all away

i clean the endless dishes and cups and utensils, but who cleans me?
If I only clean myself, will I ever truly be clean?
will i ever be shiny and untarnished again? no scratches, no dents, just shiny silver.
will it be a re start? or can I begin anew memories intact? do I even want to?
if all the soap scums leave will I become the sink of Thesus?
i swirl with deep thoughts and questions of who i am (who am i? i am who? am i who?)

but i am insentient to emotional feelings, only sentient to pots and pans,
they bang and scrap and scatter, leaving scars and memories like wandering ants,
dump their grime through my heart, just glad to get away
but no one asks if I am ready to be defiled, they just say it's my higher purpose
i exist for others. i exist to be filled, to cleanse, to take away what they don't want.

and then i am forgotten, left behind, simple and deep and empty,
light blurs off my scars and scrapes; no one will ever see my brokenness.
i'm just the holder of your dish anxiety
and i'm too fulll to hold my own tears.


Thank you for reading <333




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Fri Sep 06, 2024 1:53 am
alliyah says...



Love a good collab poem! <3




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Thu Sep 05, 2024 7:25 pm
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Grabbing the Kettle...


Hi, guys! century here to review this wonderful work using my tea making method! Let's dive in.

Boiling the Water
first impressions

i love collab poems so much! the sink descriptions scattered throughout were just everything to me. i loved the way you all pondered about becoming anew with cleaning, and describing the pots and pans that go into the sink? genius!

the ending too! ahh! the way it becomes desolate and unfeeling is so amazing. i loved this so much.

Steeping the Leaves
compliments

a few stand out lines in my opinion:

nothing reveals my deepest depths where secrets lay forgotten and
scraps of food are swirled down to their eternal repose.

the use of respose was beautiful, and i also love how scar described secrets "laying forgotten" instead of like. staying forgotten, for example.

but i am insentient to emotional feelings, only sentient to pots and pans,

dump their grime through my heart, just glad to get away

these two were so pretty together! "insentient to emotional feelings" HELLO??? that was such a great poetic choice! and also the way it was described how pots & pans only dump their dirt into the sink so they don't have to deal with it? amazing.

but no one asks if I am ready to be defiled, they just say it's my higher purpose

the person-ness (personification?) of the sink in this sentence was amazing! i loved how it added to the poem and specifically how the sink is wondering about why it itself is never cleaned/cared for.

Adding Some Honey
critiques/room for improvement


I don't have anything to say here! This poem was beautiful, and i hope i could join in on the poeting next time :P

Enjoy Your Tea!
final notes


this was so beautiful to read, i love sink poetry now??? (dishwashers part 2?)

-never stop writing-

century




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Cheerio says...



Wow, I’ve never thought about my sink so deeply before. Good work, keep writing. (Sorry for the short review)
God bless
~Charli




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farq4d says...



favorite part was guessing who wrote what until i scrolled a little further and saw the key LOL

also this quote goes hard:

but no one asks if i am ready to be defiled, they just say it's my higher purpose


like i don't even know what to say. love it all




EllieMae says...


Ahhh, thank you!!!! :D



WeepingWisteria says...


Omg that's my line!!! I'm glad you like it <33



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RavenAkuma says...



Awesome poem, all of you! :D




EllieMae says...


Awe, thank you so much!! (:




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