Desdemona, Hi I’m Ashkitten and I’m here to review. I love the philosophical nature of this. I love that it’s thought provoking. These are all questions that we have all asked, so it is very relatable. So well done!
The only thing for me, is that the line where you say “listen to yourself, listen past your body calls, past your urges and your needs”
It’s a long line and it took away from the simple form I was appreciating in short lines. Maybe just separate that line into 2, I liked being able to read each line like taking small bites of food, savoring the flavor with each small bite. That one line was just a bit overwhelming to me, But that is just my opinion. Great work! Keep writing! I loved it!!!!
Points: 194
Reviews: 38
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