Hey there CreativelyWritten. It's just Lizzy dropping by real quick, so without a further ado, let the reviewing begin.
But not quite yet. Just wanted to say that I'm not going to be here long because frankly the poems short and I'm also on mobile which really limits length.
Okay so the main reason I clicked on your poem was the title. I like (we'll sort of) everything literary connected to demons. It's just that they're really interesting or really bad, which makes it funny for me both ways. I haven't read much of yours but it's currently sitting at the halfway point of those two.
So I was wondering if you had meant to split this up a bit. I know the publishing center sort of messes up any format from imported documents. If you didn't have an idea to split up the poem, I think you should. The poem flows together a bit much because of all of the ideas running together.
The last line is really cool. Haha. I've said that way too many times at this point haven't I. I need to be a bit more careful about that. I liked the poem overall but there were a couple of things that bothered me.
The imagery was okay but it didn't get across a really dark idea. You know what I mean? You were aiming for a description of where the devil 'lives'. But instead it seemed lighter than what you should have tried for. I'm not sure how to explain it but you just need to make it darker and scarier than you already have it.
If any of those paragraphs made any sense please feel free to tell me so. That's some reviewing humor there, probably not for everybody.
Well that's about all I have anyways so have a nice day.
Happy RevMo.
Lizzy
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