Walking in the park you see,
Faces passing by.
Happy, sad, old, and young,
Faces in the sky.
A million faces
In the world.
A million stories,
I am to you
Just another face,
In this ever-flowing race.
Demoncat here reviewing.I really like this poem. It has a nice flow to it. It's short and sweet. And it's got just enough sassyness. I do really love this though. You are a really good author and I hope to read more poetry. And I like how you ended it. Saying it was like a race. It was a fun little read. And I enjoyed it.
Hey, CorvusQueen!!! It is me, Bells, to help repay a review to you! First off, Let me just say, I love this, it was unique, and really easy to read. I loved how you formatted, and layed out your words. It caught my attention and kept it the whold time. And your choice of words put a clear image in my head. Problem #1 : I say a few minor problems, and most of them are just picky stuff from me, and you dont have to use any of them if you don't want to. First stanza:
Walking in the park you see,Faces passing by.Happy, sad, old, and young,Faces in the sky.
A million facesIn the world.A million stories,Together curled.
I am to youJust another face,Another competitor,In this ever-flowing race.
Hello! It's I FlamingPhoenix here with another review for you on this lovely day, and to help get your work out the green room for you. Okay let's start the review. So out of the whole poem, there was only one thing I saw that needed to be fixed, and it was only a small mistake.
Happy, sad, old, and young
This poem was interesting. The rhyme scheme is well-executed, and the ending brings a sort of closure to the poem that was nice to read. My critique would be to change the words "Happy, sad, old, and young" for more descriptive words that are more fun to read. However, if simplicity is one of your goals in writing, keep the words as they are. Overall, I enjoyed reading this.
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