Living

hello, Ash here for a review
so a few things before i get to what i think
My ankles are tied by your blood-red roses.

My wrists are wrapped in your scarlet silk.

My speech is coated in (here i think the word "with" goes better than "in") your golden syrup.

My sight is filtered by your opaque, sequined evil.(i love this line )

My hearing is muffled by your everlasting chants of security.

***

I have been a queen ruling a land from a safe distance.

I have been showered by(again, i think the word "with" goes better here) your grace and love and trust.

Others, you say, cannot be trusted with a beauty as such.

Others, I see, rule their lands with sophistication and elegance I had never known.

***

My ankles are wept upon by the last of the rose’s oozing fragrance.

My virgin wrists are paralyzed as the material is ruptured from my silken skin.

My speech is disintegrated as it knows not how to function without the glazy(here i think you should have said "glazed") finish.

I am blinded by radiance and incandescence I've never known.

I am deafened by noise and chaos and music I've never heard before.

***

I am the Queen ruling her land in the midst of a raging battlefield.

No armour(im not going to be too picky but its spelled "armor" usually but i know other places spell it "armour") could ever protect me from the beautiful turmoil yet to come.

Appreciative I am of all your services,

Services you bestowed upon me with the greatest of intentions, I know.

My years of beautiful blissful blindness have come to and (this needs to be "an" instead of
"and")end now.

***

I am living.
OKAY
so this is a really good poem. like crystalrose said, this reminds me of an overly controlling relationship that is entirely one-sided, which always sucks.
this is really really good though
keep up the amazing writing
i look forward to seeing more from you in the future!
best!
>Ash

Crystal rose here to give a review. i'm sorry this is bad, i'm not the best at giving reviews.

This poem is really good.you used imagery well and i was able to picture what was going on.
This poem made me think of a relationship a controlling and more one-sided relationship.
A couple of my favorite lines are "I am a queen ruling her land in the midst of a raging battlefield" and "My ankles are tied by your blood-red roses" these evoke powerful feelings and amongst others are very strong and create the image.

Can't wait to read some more of your amazing work

Legacy here for a review.

I love this poem. It reminds me sort of like a dominative relationship but it seems like for the character it wasn't fully consensual. You used imagery so well, I was able to see what was going on. I love the imagery about the wrists wrapped in silk (a usually delicate material used in an undelicate way).

My favorite lines are "My years of beautiful blissful blindness have come to an end now" and "My virgin wrists are paralyzed as the material is ruptured from my silken skin".

Sorry I wasn't able to say anything you could work on except a typo where you put and instead of an, but I don't see any grammatical errors or structural issues (punctuation, stanza breaks, and capitalization).

Legacy out.