Screw money!

Hi, there! (I'm on my phone so I apologize for any stupid auto-correcting).

I'm going to start off with just pointing out a few nitpicky things that irked me. For one, I felt like you used exclamation points way too much. A few are fine, to show your proud and loud exclamation, but I feel like after every other line? Not so much. So, I advise you to take away just a few of those. Your flow also improves massively by doing so!

Punctuation is key; and you don't exactly have enough. Try a few commas after some lines, a period once a stanza is over. Much smoother that way!

I admire you for having the guts to rhyme, but I feel like it was a bit too forced. I really really like your meaning behind this poem, but the rhyming kind of threw it off. Rhymes are okay for some poems if a) are not forced, and b) are used correctly and in the correct type of context.

Speaking of really really liking your meaning behind this - it was inspirational, motivational, and boost-worthy. I loved it and I liked the whole 'pursue your dream!' message behind this. Now - I feel like you executed this a bit poorly. It seems to me you were trying to make it a humorous poem? This kind of message is usually used in a serious matter, but I do admire you for taking a turn and trying to make it funny.

One thing. The title. It's a little too... how should I say it? Hard-humor, I guess. It doesn't really draw a reader iin. You can still make your poem funny, but I think a different title would work better (you choose, though! You're the writer )

As always, keep writing!

~ EternalRain

Hey there! Gonna review your poem quick
Overall, I liked it a lot! I feel like it's both relatable and compelling to read. The last stanza, is particularly my favorite! "Like aint worth a penny!" I love this.
Anyway, I don't really have any suggestions, as I didn't catch any errors or anything like that. Your poem is very well written! I'll have to check out some of your other work.