My eyes have grown weary over the past few years
Because of the disappointment I’ve caused, and the abundance of tears
Here is the apology for my underachievement
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I’m sorry to my love, for being so bland
I wish for us to relax and play in the sand
I love you with all of me, and I can’t forgive myself.
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I’m sorry to my parents, for giving up so fast
But I feel like I inevitably finish last
Forgive me for the words I kept hidden inside
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I’m sorry to my teachers, for being such a juvenile
I understand that I was quite senile
I wish I would have matured much faster
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I’m sorry to my friends for being so distant
I know that ninety percent of the time, I was nonexistent.
But deep inside, I love you all so much
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I’m sorry to the world for being so pessimistic
I just feel like everyone is so narcissistic
I gave up quite quickly, forgive me.
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I love you all, quite deeply too
And the last thing I ever wanted to do was leave anyone blue
But, that is my biggest talent and I’m sorry to all I left shattered.
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BaileyTheHoosier,
This was a wonderful poem! I took this poem to heart because I can relate to it. I can feel the emotion this poem brings as I read it. This poem has a lot of depth to it and I can see your pouring out your heart into it and I think that that is a good thing. I see nothing wrong with this poem at all and marvelous job at that! Overall I think you did a fantastic job writing this poem and I hope to read more of your magnificent work in the future!
AshleyDashley
I really liked this poem. I loved the way it was written. I loved the rhyme scheme. I feel like the last sentence wasn't that great. I'd love it if you could maybe reword it or something. It didn't quite feel like the end.
I can relate a lot to this poem. I'm actually sort of dealing with the same thing right now. It sucs feeling like you're the reason people are upset and it sucks noticing the pain you've caused. If you ever want to talk I'm here.
Hi I like your work! It is very heavy but, it is needed to express deep sorrow. I imagine the reader being in front of these people pleading to them. Pouring out their heart. You were really able to capture the pain and agony of disappointment. Great job and keep writing!
I do not know why this posted twice lol!