For Addie
June 9, 2007
Ridiculous remarks and smart-aleck suppositions with a side of sarcasm
Are the daily special every day
But your favorite meal is goldfish with the heads bitten off
And sometimes I wonder if you’re fourteen or four.
You’re proving Plato wrong and theorizing about Thoreau
Explaining Geometry theorems with greater clarity than Euclid
And contemplating the origins of mankind
(Fourteen going on forty).
Then you’re giggling about boys’ butts
Pulling out old dress-up clothes to create absurd outfits
And issuing death threats to the squirrels in the front yard
(Such a total teenager).
Your eyes fascinate me:
They’re brilliant and confused and determined
Standoffish and needy and proud
Dictatorial and submissive and serious
Sapient and curious and perfect
But most people just call them brown.
I know they don’t get you
(sometimes I don’t either)
But ten a.m study halls
Nightly runs
And your infrequent (but sincere) compliments
Are nestled comfortably inside me forever.
I guess some of us are just lucky like that
(“I am your personal trainer, not your friend!”)
To have such a dorky monotheist
For a sister and best friend.
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I'm not gonna lie: sisters are amazing.
Thanks for reading and replying!
i like how you added in lines in the parentheses. it made the poem more fun and childish (
) the sound of the words rolling off your tongue feels modern and happy and loving.
now i wish i had a sister.....
I really liked the twist at the end, and the way you kept me guessing until then.
Thanks to all who replied!
Addie... stop being vain.
Hehe, yes. Ordinarily I'd agree with you and change it instantly, but it's a joke between my family and me. There's a laundry place in town that has on their sign: "Daily specials every day," and Addie threatens to kick down the sign (or something equally violent) every time she sees it.
I think it's great. I especially liked the fourth stanza. I think I'd take the "every day" out of the second line though, as, since you've said "daily", I don't think you need it.
Awww. That's a real sweet poem. Makes me think about my sister and I. No bond is stronger! This poem fulfills its' purpose just fine as it is.
Hehehe, you have achieved your purpose of the poem, Fair Ari.
I love it! It makes me feel happy! I think I'll do a jig. You breathed out through your nose and looked up at me with a half smile. Then you sneezed twice. I think that means you liked my jig.
I rather like it when you stroke my ego. Love you!