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Heya back to it Hello! I'm here for both "Adopt a novel" and a Review day review! HA!

This chapter was ridiculous. And it made me feel happy for Robbie. His salvation is actually near. The sole reason why he was such a fucking asshole, his "purpose" the way he saw it, is now gone. It might be hard for him to accept he is homosexual, but it's fine, he is broken and he wil finally rebuild into another, new person.

Now I finally can grasp the whole point of your story. The Fucking society and the fucking homosexuals. I mean, this is just about what a person finding out has to go through to only accept himself the way he is. Robert could have always felt it, actually I stronly believe he did since Stephen was one of few rare people he didn't think as of retard, even though some of his beliefs are... terrible, and nonsense. I had always understood and tried to understand homosexuals, and this story of yours just helped me a lot concerning this.

Also, the structure is beautiful. I love how he accepts Chelsea, the girl who he despises, who stinks of alcohol only to prove to himself he is 'normal'. And well, the way he described her kisses as if he would womit, I knew it's not about her breath. Yay for me, yay for your brilliant writing.

Finally, he escapes. Well, a public gay kiss might be a strange way to show who he was. Also, his inability to change it, maybe he actually really didn't want to be gay but hey thats the way it is, it is displayed in how he talked to his sexual fantasy, Katie. He knew he couldn't have sex with her, and he saw the conversation was leading to it, so he just insulted her. Nicely done.

-Alchemist

This is fucking awesome, almost an orgasm to the eyes. There was so much humor in this, I bust out laughing a hundred times or so.
You have a dirty mind and I totally dig that.
Your detailing was on point and could imagine that horrible taste of alcohol in my very on mouth when I make out with my boyfriend.
I like that you skip the indirect characterization and just tell us who they are and what they do.
You have compelling hook for the chapter, it's defiantly a page turner.
So Robert and Stephan make out correct? I think I missed something there lol

I saw no wrong, spelling error. Nothing and it was just freaking funny and Professional.
Great Job!^_^

Good evening darling!

Stop fussing that this chapter is going to be bad! Because it isn't!
And you haven't disappointed me :p

So... good points:

1. Robert's character progression
2. Use of dialogue
3. Description of the scene
4. the whole Romeo and Juliet metaphor thing, it really works. XD Especially since you are changing the vibe to more Romeo and Romeo. Lulz
5. Thank you for branching out and making the stereotypical teenage party, not seem quite so cliche. - think Robert has A LOT to do with that; and also, a unique writing style.
6. the "Rupert" motif is actually really humorous.
7. Good use of rhetorical questions and other in-genius literary devices (with Robert's twist) similes etc.

Improvement points:

1. Where are the speech tags!? XP Lulz
2. your description and dialogue look like they are fighting each other for a place in the story and it interrupts the flow somewhat
3. Is all the profanity REALLY necessary??? *narrows eyes*

I think this line sums up the entire direction of the novel at this point: (and quite perfectly so)

Well this has certainly changed the dynamic of how I envisioned the night to become.

Oh. Wait, hang on. I don't like this. I don't like this at all.

"Ohhhh. This makes sense."