Hey there!
This was such a sweet poem—especially compared with the first iteration of it (or the prequel to it? It's kind of both, in a way). I loved the callbacks you made to the original poem, like the "fighting God" aspect of it. I also just love the narrative in this; reconciliation with things that will never be is so important in life, and I feel like I never hear people talk/write about it. You really did a nice job of showing how love is love, no matter whether it's platonic or romantic.
I think my favorite part was the end, with the repetition of "and." It was so nice for building a consistent rhythm and it lent itself super nicely to that sweet ending.
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