i must let everyone i know know that i do things too

text version:
i must let everyone i know know that i do things too (but i don’t have anyone)


buy ourselves old cameras
and go and pose for photos
in the glowing bournemouth sun liked by 78 others

buy each other drinks in spoons
and post them on our stories
when the day is through and done liked by 56 others

buy new tents and sleeping bags
and go camping on the moors
where we have just a bit too much fun liked by 43 others

have a girly movie night
curled up in your unmade bed
we have morning coffee with your mum liked by 10 others

smoke a fat joint outside
in a field by your old house
and burn the tip of my thumb liked by 2 others


followed by you:


scroll through what could be’s
and what could I have done’s?
if i had been somebody else
might i belong to someone?

Hia Rev!
Pls ignore how I am not answering any reviews and instead just write more comments XD

I can see why this poem gained so much traction. I really like how you structured it, and how the likes slowly petered out toward the end.

I got a bit confused over what you meant by “buying drinks in spoons” is this… a trend that I’m missing bc I’m not on social media?

I think I get the message, that the more personal and fulfilling and not… artificial the fotos become, the less people are interested in them? But then… the summary said something abt how the others are still hanging out and doing stuff and the title says something abt needing to share with the world in order to not be left behind? Or at least give the impression that things are happening in your life too?

So I guess, even the narrator doesn’t believe in these “not much liked” moments, believing them to be inconsequential when compared to the things the other ppl post?

So I guess the other interpretation of the poem is that all these moments are things that the narrator is NOT participating in and therefore feeling left out? Because they have nothing of the sort to share?

Tho ok, maybe I am to blinded by the novelty of the structure of the poem to fully understand it. I’m not sure I understand what Skorpionne meant abt the grounding with the “followed by you”
(Then again, I am also not on insta so idk maybe it makes sense when you are immersed in that UI?)

"If i had been somebody else
Might I belong to someone?"

That in itself is a super powerful line. Great work here! I also love the formatting you used. Its very clear you put work into this. Nicely done!!

hi i like this poem alot, honestly it's like high-key giving off fomo which i think is KIND OF the main theme of this poem? and i really like the flow of the poem, it's really good and and it's pretty realistic too, which ik ik its a tag, but like jeez come on i can mention it okay, honestly to a certain extent i can definitely relate, and perhaps to those who can, it's sort of nice right like i really like it, it's creative and it's also really delving into the feels of scrolling through what could have been if you just had a life (this is sort of projecting) but anyway that's what i think about the poem, to conclude, i dont really see any correction because tbh me personally i dont get the point in correcting poetry poetry is js poetry fr so, keep writing n good day!

Hiiii! I just wanted to take a moment to reach out and tell you that I absolutely love this poem so much. Seriously, it completely blew me away.What struck me the most is how it offers a whole different perspective from what poems are usually about. So much poetry tends to hit the same traditional themes, but your work feels incredibly fresh, unique, and thought-provoking. I absolutely love what you did with the concept, the structure, and the imagery. It is honestly so good, and the depth you managed to convey left a huge impression on me.I can say without a doubt that I actually really, really enjoyed reading it from start to finish. I found myself re-reading certain lines just to let the meaning sink in. You do an amazing job with your craft, and the way you write is just all so captivating, beautiful, and comforting. You have a real gift for pulling the reader into your world.I am already so excited for your future work and truly can't wait to see whatever other poems you write next. Please keep sharing your voice and your talent with the world because your writing is wonderful.

This is a really beautiful poem. I love how you've used the 'liked by' and 'followed by you' as a kind of structural grounding, and the indentation really helps that feeling of something slipping away. The rhyme scheme slipping from sun/done/fun and then going to mum/thumb via a half-rhyme and then BACK AGAIN for 'someone' is honestly inspired. It's not a noticeable change, but suddenly something is gone (or changed, at the very least) and you only notice when you're looking back at something you can no longer reach. It's a feeling I can very much relate to. Thank you so much for sharing it.

hello! This is a beautiful poem. i used to share every single photo i took too. i wanted people to see that i was not empty, i had things i liked and did. but i had to stop that for my own good because i realized i was getting obsessed with likes and comments. i still like to take photos, but i keep them to myself, i like them as funny little memories :3 we shouldn't compare ourselves with other people on social media, every one of us have a unique personality and a different lifestyle. we must be proud of it!!

Hi Rev You know the drill!

I think this poem is very relevant and speaks to the world we live in and have created for ourselves. I really like the way you set the poem up, with the "like" count beside each section. Really helps drive the point home.

Seeking validation is ultimately, in my opinion, a natural human behavior and probably something that developed to assist us with survival. If we are being accepted by those around us, we were more likely to survive in a harsh world. I don't think it is inherently bad but any behavior, if out of balance, can have negative outcomes. The world is differently harsh now. We are much more removed from the primal reality with our electricity and internet and ease of travel and really ease of living in general, but that primality is still there. It is still a reality for many on the planet.

I do wonder how long it would take to evolve past the need for validation as a survival instinct. If we are even able to continue to sustain an environment where it is less needed, our species may reach that one day. How different the world look if that happened. Certainly not in our lifetimes.

So, while it is still an instinct that doesn't mean we can't train ourselves to seek it less.

"scroll through what could be’s
and what could I have done’s?
if i had been somebody else
might i belong to someone?"

This last section hit me harder than the rest. I am not one who posts much on socials, but I am a scroller and have definitely had those what ifs and what could have been thoughts.

Thanks for sharing your poem with us!