Hi @1nspire! I love this poem! It is simple, yet the message is powerful. I love the rhyming pattern you used and I feel that it contributes to the tone of the poem, especially in the third stanza:
"So here I remain,
forgotten by the world,
listening to the rain,
no other sounds to be heard"
This is very deep and serious and the rhythm of these lines helps me understand that.
You did a great job selecting words that would generate imagery for the reader. As I read the poem, I could see exactly what you were describing.
I loved the ending where you revealed that you were actually a bench. The personification was amazing and I could relate to your message even from my perspective. I really liked this poem and what you were trying to convey to your readers through it. Keep writing!
Points: 34
Reviews: 4
Donate