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I love the rhyming in this, it really helps the poem flow.

Hi. This is kman134. I'm here to review your work.

There is nothing worse than unrequited love. you have someone who loves doubt you don't love him/her back. However, you feel guilty that you might be leading them astray. Sometimes, it's best to sets them down and tell them straight that you don't feel the same way. While the response might be painful and distraught, the outcome might actually be very good for the both of you.

"I know that what I'm doing
is terrible and wrong;
that I'm just hurting you
by leading you on."

I love the symbolism of pain and anguish is well written in this stanza. it shows the reader your hesitation of telling your friend how you truly feel, but the ambivalence of the outcome is too risky and you just want to lag them on without fully hurting them. I love how you use rhyming in your work, which is out school but still effective in your work. however, I will have to agree some of your stanzas were a bit long and you might want to look back at it.

Anyways, I love your work. I hope to read more of yours.

Hey there 1nspire.

I don't think you've written too much poetry, or at least you haven't posted that much, so from looking from the inexperience point of view, you're off to a great start.

Though the capitalization pattern makes me think that you're starting to get a hang on your own style, it's also a very generic style. The repetitive use of "I", is part of what brought me to this conclusion, just because it's a thing that inexperienced poets like to use. Rather than really addressing the problem at hand, it's similar to just talking to yourself. It's also a contributing message in love poems, since they're just conversations to the writer, rather than the intended recipient.

You say that you love me
again and again,
but to me
we're just good friends.

I have no response
because what can I say?
How do I tell you
that I don't feel the same?

I have no response,
because what can I say?
How do I tell you that
I don't feel the same?

Omg, I love how you incorporated rhyming into your poem, it actually fit well and flowed nicely, there were a few lines that seemed too long and threw off my concentration but the overall poem is great, good job! 8/10 I like the idea behind this poem and you can definitely feel the sincerity behind it, you did a good job sticking to the scene and theme. You didn't drift off like I often read with poems, overall good. I didn't find any mistakes with grammar or anything like that also.