Hi @1inspire! I really like this poem. Your message is beautiful and definitely made me emotional while I was reading it. I love how the tone of the poem changes from the beginning to the end from joyful and upbeat to sad. I think you did a very good job in representing the reality of life and love. Your choice of words and line structure was very important in conveying the meaning of your poem. I love the imagery you create in the first stanza when you write "If I had a grain of sand
for every laugh you've caused
the largest desert couldn't compete".
It really helped me visualize what you were feeling and how you tried to put that into writing. I really liked how your rhyming pattern changed as the mood changed throughout the poem. I also like how the ending was sad, but in a way, still had some happiness to it. Your poem is beautiful and well written and I really enjoyed it. Keep writing!
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