This was very good, and I really liked it. It was very interesting, there were a few things here and there that I'd like to point out.
One, I wish you had added more detail. Just a tiny bit more, it was very short, and that's not always a bad thing, but a bit more emotion would have been great.
Second, I wish you showed them interact a bit more. Like, before the call ended, I wish we got to see some of there conversation that he maybe called her princess in to set up the ending.
Third, this is a tiny detail, but did the girl ever call him? Or did she just wait for him to call her? This is a tiny detail that I wish was addressed.
Finally, why did he leave her? I don't know if you meant for it to end like that, but I want a explanation! I wish you tied up the loose ends.
Other then that, this was really good, and I can not wait to read more from you! As always, keep writing and have fun doing it!
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