Hallo! Retro here!
I'll do nitpicks then talk about what I like, okay?
Now there isn't much to go on...You've made a list, and some imagery but there is nothing to back it up. You say that they're gooey feelings but that really doesn't tell us much as a reader. I get it's simple and what not but I personally feel as though we need more as a reader. because there really isn't an identitfier or a voice at the moment.
But that's it for nitpicks as, like I said, there isn't much. But what you do have is good. I love the imagery, and I love the sort of idea you have with it. Especially Dark red blood, i think it is beautiful and i'm not entirely sure why!
I think you backed up imagery with a bit more emotion this would be absolutely fantastic. I'm sorry I don't have more to say!
But here if you need me!
Keep it up!
~Retro
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