Hey IlhamAlKhatib, Strange here and I have a review for you!
Sadly, this fell disappointing. I do want to say what I thought was bad about this, but let me get on the good stuff first.
The idea, even though it's cliched, is interesting. It kept me hooked and was interesting. No one was taught about being a third wheel. Being a third wheel freaking sucks, right? The story covers a subject we all can relate.
The idea, writing, style, sadly was disappointing. This felt cliched. This can be pulled out of a kid books. It's not unique, it's a story like the others. Also, what is up with the format of this?
If you do edit this, you can go above and beyond. Add more detail and make the narrator less whiny, sorry for saying that. I understand that I may come off as a prude, but I'm just stating what needs to be said.
Overall, meh.
Strange gives you...
5.0/10
Good job
Keep writing
Stay groovy, my amigo
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