Young Writers Society

Hello, rhia here!

I like this a lot, but I'm going to do some edit and suggesting first. Mostly just little nitpicks.

I was reading Catcher in The rye,

And I’d read you chapters of The Catcher And The Rye,

Though I don’t what it was.

Then you found me,

One day alone in a coffee shop,

Though we went it to be

When we’d sit staring out that small hospital window,

You where my best four years,

Okay, calm.
RoyalHighness has arrived to review.
This, in short, broke my heart. Just. This poem took my heart, and raised it up over its head, and then smashed it on the ground.
I sincerely hope you are not writing from personal experience.
I...there just aren't /words/ sometimes for how beautiful something is.
And that's your poem.
I just...I had a friend who was my Peer Leader at school (a senior who helps a freshman acclimate to high school) who died of cancer and now I'm a Peer Leader and he's in a grave and I just wish I could show him this poem because it's just so beautiful. And even though we were never and would never have been romantically involved, it still reminds me of him. Thank you.

Ten stars of ten. Ten. That's all I have to say.

I need a minute. This...this was a trigger, and I need to...oh, God. I'll come back and review in a minute.

Absolutely positively the most amazing thing I have ever read. I see no problem with it in any way shape of form. I don't do spelling or grammar errors so there you have it
I cant wait to read more of you fantastic work Thank you for the opportunity to read your work.

This is perfectly amazing! I love the feeling you put into this, and the metaphors, the addition about the kiss. Overall this is so romantic!

I also feel feelings of sadness as well as the romantic air to this. I love the way you combined this feeling of love AND the feeling of despair into this poem.


It wasn't too long, it wasn't too short, I didn't see any errors and I don't have recommendations other than that you made more poems and stories for me to read and review! Thanks for making this!

This is beautiful, I loved it.
It was angelic, but sorrowful.
The only thing I'd say, is "you where my best friend" should be were.
That's all:)

This is beautiful, I loved it.
It was angelic, but sorrowful.
The only thing I'd say, is "you where my best friend" should be were.
That's all:)

Hey retro here for a review!

This is fantastic. Simply put, beautiful. I'm going to do some nitpicks and then tell you what I love.

One the line 'though we went it to be' I think you mean want

And the first time you mention catcher in the rye you didn't capitalise it all (I know I haven't here but I'm being lazy haha)

Now On to what I love. To be honest I love it all, I think you've got well formed imagery, I think your themes and ideas are incredibly well written and the message speaks to me
On a personal level. I think the poem is absolutely fantastic so a great well done to you!

I know this review isn't must but I just wanted to say well done

Keep it up,
~retro