Hello! I'm here for both "Adopt a novel" and a Review day review!
So, this was a good chapter overal. Style is good, plot is as good as always, your characterisation is awesome.
So, lets talk about Robert. He acted as such an asshole here, it's basically him who created every inconvenience Stephen had to face here. Actually, there was one thing which was somewhat strange to me, and that is, why didn't Stephen actually tell Rob how much of an asshole he was? It would be rather expected from the character you had built. I mean, he was always so straightforward with Robbie and Robert seemed to appreciate what Stephen had to say. This even led me reconsidering if Robert actually didn't act as an asshole, but yeah, he surely did.
But I can understand it if Stephen just had something else in mind, which he did, at the very end of the chapter but again, I wouldn't expect that from the person you built. Well, things change.
So this bascially isn't a complaint, just a little strange thing I didn't expect but actually works very well.
For the end, let me comment on his family. I feel sorry for his brother. His mom seems like a terrible one though, completely missunderstanding her son and pretty much doing nothing to help him.
Keith, on the other hand, is a cool person. He knows well what's he dealing with. Him trying to act nice with Stephen proves it, and even the way he acted with Robert, it was just neccesairy. I hope he stays with them.
So far with it, I like it more and more.
-Alchemist
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