Hello! I'm back for an "Adopt a novel" review!
This is an interesting chapter that fortifies his interaction with Stephen. Well, there is something, even if Rober is not really sure what, but he surely has something for him. It's nice to have that shown with Stephen interrupting his hetero-dream he had.
Now, there is something that so far stood out for me here. I don't think I've noticed anything like that so far in your story, so let me say it; this part of the sentence
"but I am mature and he’s not"
is just something I wouldn't have expect to hear from the character you have created. Now, if that sentence itself was intentional, and I hope it was, than it is really good, since what we so far witnessed was Robert pretty much loosing it, and giving us such an obvious evidence within that small sentece is great.
Your style was on level with what you have done so far, so well done.
-Alchemist
Points: 5984
Reviews: 87
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