I rather enjoyed this poem despite the fact that it wasn't very original.
My favourite lines would have to be:
Made of Coal and soot,
Where Satan's secrets lie,
right between the roots.
I felt that this was rather powerful if not a little clichéd. Like many have said before me the rhyming scheme was rather confusion. Was there supposed to be one? If there was I certainly couldn't see it.
All in all I felt that this poem lacked any real emotion and felt really generic, saying that I did enjoy it as poems like this do have a soft spot within me. Good job and keep on writing!
Points: 408
Reviews: 193
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