You Know You Want Some [re-opened]

Please could you review my poem, I need some feedback.

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thank you

^ Done.

Anything else?

Yeah I would like some comments on my novel. I have postedprologue and chapter one. Thanks. I am in much need of reviews for my chapter-1.
LINKS:
A Criminal's Heart-Prologue
A Criminal's Heart Chapter-1(OLIVIA)

Hey, it would be nice if you could give an overall impression of my short piece called Rosalie. It's Other Fiction. http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post668207.html?hilit=rosalie#p668207Thanks a bunch-

KD

Demeter! Thank you so much for the comments on 'He Stood'. I am looking in to why everyone thinks those parts are choppy, and it's also really valuable to me that you pointed out the topic shift in the third stanza!

Would you mind letting me know what you think of this piece? It's under 'other fiction'.

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IT doesn't have to be anything too intensive, unless you think that's what it needs. xD

Love you!

Hi! I'd love it if you'd review my lyric poem.

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It's one of my favorite poems, but it's not where I need it to be & I'd like some help . I looked at the list of things you say you focus on and I think that's exactly where I need help.

Thanks in advance.

Bit'a poetry that could do with some feedback if your in the mood Dems (: topic60591.html

Hopefully it's not too bad since it's the edited version ;D
Thankyouu
~Ben

Hey Dems! Mind doing two of my poems?

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And....

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^.^ Thankies. *tosses Dems chocolate*

Would you be so kind and review my second chapter to my horror shorty story?

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic60794.html

Thanks!

Hello!
Consider reviewing this poem?
It's currently untitled.
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Thanks.

I want you to review my new piece of work. It's romantic fiction, but the romance hasn't started yet. Well, the story is called The Orphanage. The main plot hasn't started quite yet, either, though.. Here's a link: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic60955.html And you'll find a link to the first part of the first chapter too. Thanks.

Done!

Hey, Demeter, um, I wouldn't mind a review. I'm currently working on an action adventure piece, I don't know if that will interest you because it does have swearing in it, but I'd really like some more opinions especially on improvements, things like the plot, the characters, etc.
Here's the link if you can review:
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Thanks, I really appreciate it
DM.

It's done!

Can you review this for me? Please..

A Criminal's Heart Chapter-2
A criminal's heart chapter-3