You Know You Want Some [re-opened]

Demeter · 2008-11-30T10:28:58Z

Hi! Because you have entered, it seems you would like a review from me. That's wonderful. What I'd rather not review: Fanfiction Fantasy Sci-fi Very long chapters Multiple chapters - give me one at a time.* What I'd rather review: Everything else. But please keep in mind that I can't really go that deep into poems - I'll try my best, but I might not always understand them. ;) What I focus on while reviewing: Nit-picks (like grammar, spelling, structure, awkwardly phrased sentences) Believability etc. (eg. in dialogue) Overall impression Rhyme scheme/rhythm (in poetry) Imagery (in poetry) What you should do: Give me the link and genre of the piece you want to be reviewed. If you want, you can say a few words about the piece. *What you shouldn't do: Give me more than one piece of yours at a time. (If you do this, I will most likely only review the first one.) After I've reviewed that one, you can ask for more. Payment: None. Although, I might like you better if you treated me with some chocolate every now and then. In queue: None! Please note: I hope you can be patient. I will do what I've promised to do, but sometimes I'm more busy and can't do the review very quickly, especially if there's a queue. Thanks for understanding. :) Fire away! ;)

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Tue Jan 26, 2010 4:59 pm

Demeter says... · Tue Jan 26, 2010 4:59 pm

Done!

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Tue Jan 26, 2010 5:43 pm

Jennafina says... · Tue Jan 26, 2010 5:43 pm

Hey, Deme my darling.

If you get time, could you review my short Other Fiction story Dancers in the Darkness?

I could use some no nonsense feedback. Anything you notice would really help. If you'd like me to critique something of yours in return, you should send me a link, I'd be happy to!

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Tue Jan 26, 2010 7:55 pm

Lord Anzius says... · Tue Jan 26, 2010 7:55 pm

Hullo Deme

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?t=47202

Please

I would be ever so thankful

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Tue Feb 02, 2010 4:19 pm

Demeter says... · Tue Feb 02, 2010 4:19 pm

Done!

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Wed Feb 03, 2010 12:37 am

pudin.junidf says... · Wed Feb 03, 2010 12:37 am

Hey Demi!

Can you review this for me please?
Is under Lyric Poetry and its called Little Missy

Thanks so much

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Sat Feb 06, 2010 11:28 am

Halycon says... · Sat Feb 06, 2010 11:28 am

Would you mind reviewing this poem?
I haven't got much feedback.

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Thu Feb 11, 2010 6:43 am

Demeter says... · Thu Feb 11, 2010 6:43 am

Keep them coming =)

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Thu Feb 11, 2010 8:30 pm

romance otaku says... · Thu Feb 11, 2010 8:30 pm

Hi. I was wondering if you would give me your opinion on the prologue of my book, "When the Sky Bleeds". It is an action/paranormal romance, but the prologue sets everything up, so it is a bit longer and more bland than the usual prologue. Hope you don't mind.

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Sun Feb 14, 2010 10:56 am

Demeter says... · Sun Feb 14, 2010 10:56 am

Done de done done.

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Mon Feb 15, 2010 9:52 pm

foxfire says... · Mon Feb 15, 2010 9:52 pm

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Hey, demeter...foxfire here...

can you review this for me...It's a story for a contest and its deadline is coming soon....

Thanks!

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Wed Mar 03, 2010 11:26 am

Demeter says... · Wed Mar 03, 2010 11:26 am

Back in business!

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Wed Mar 03, 2010 12:26 pm

MiaParamore says... · Wed Mar 03, 2010 12:26 pm

Hi I would like my work to be get reviewed by you as you're a senior writer.

Finding me back- prologue

Finding me back-Chapter 1

You just do prologue for now then you just go to prologue.

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I might have to bend it back
Or break it, break it off
Next time you point a finger
I'll point you to the mirror"

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Sun Mar 07, 2010 5:12 pm

Demeter says... · Sun Mar 07, 2010 5:12 pm

Done.

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Sun Mar 07, 2010 11:19 pm

Valentine says... · Sun Mar 07, 2010 11:19 pm

HI Demeter. Please review chapter three of Shades of Violet. Its adventure/fiction. Hope you like it.

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic59837.html

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Fri Mar 12, 2010 4:23 pm

bubblegum says... · Fri Mar 12, 2010 4:23 pm

I know you want to review my prologue! Just kidding. xD
Well, it's fantasy fiction and only 500 words or so.

Here's the link: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic60030.html

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