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Sun Apr 26, 2009 7:14 am
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BarrettBenedict says...



This is pretty simple and can be lots of fun. The premise is you take the last line of the haiku before yours and make it the first as yours. It doesn't necessarily have to be the exact line either. If you can cleverly change it in subtle ways so that it rhymes or sounds the same that is also cool. Example:

This is a haiku
five, seven, five syllables
would be the format

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could be a doormat
were it not for the large head
must be tiger's skin

etc.

So here's a starter haiku:

old film reels rotate
monochrome images of
what dogs imagine
"Is", "is." "is" — the idiocy of the word haunts me. If it were abolished, human thought might begin to make sense. I don't know what anything "is"; I only know how it seems to me at this moment. -Robert Anton Wilson
  





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Sun Apr 26, 2009 6:06 pm
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3hundred1 says...



what dogs imagine
fields of steak filled ecstasy
will never happen
It is a very sad thing that nowadays there is so little useless information.
- Oscar Wilde
  





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Mon Apr 27, 2009 2:06 am
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BarrettBenedict says...



Will never happened
upon a lesser carnage
birds eat cats eat men
"Is", "is." "is" — the idiocy of the word haunts me. If it were abolished, human thought might begin to make sense. I don't know what anything "is"; I only know how it seems to me at this moment. -Robert Anton Wilson
  





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Mon Apr 27, 2009 2:50 am
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siobhan says...



birds eat cats eat men
the carnage is cyclical
hunger never ends

Lol, they're all about eating so far, mostly. Nom nom.
  





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Mon Apr 27, 2009 4:21 am
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Helpful McHelpfulpants says...



hunger never ends
in the cold breath of mornings
uncounted, loveless.
Nunc lac est bibendum.
  





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Mon Apr 27, 2009 5:15 am
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BarrettBenedict says...



Helpful McHelpfulpants, I love your name!

uncounted, loveless
"Son cosas de la vida,"
buck up, yellow-gut
"Is", "is." "is" — the idiocy of the word haunts me. If it were abolished, human thought might begin to make sense. I don't know what anything "is"; I only know how it seems to me at this moment. -Robert Anton Wilson
  





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alliyah says...



"Buck up, Yellow-Gut!"
cried the hawk to the gold-finch
"Birds have to eat worms."
maybe i make up colors for poetic cadence, but i don't think i can ever love someone who doesn't understand that teal is a different color than dark cyan
  





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Traves says...



Early birds eat worms,
therefore, Lazy Worm argues --
early worms get ate.
Last edited by Traves on Mon Dec 17, 2018 3:16 am, edited 2 times in total.
  





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alliyah says...



early worms risen
out of dirt and side-walk cracks
stretch to find the sun
maybe i make up colors for poetic cadence, but i don't think i can ever love someone who doesn't understand that teal is a different color than dark cyan
  





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AmadeusW says...



Stretch to find the sun -
It's okay if you get burned,
Just don't hurt your eyes.
"The dead look so terribly dead when they're dead." - Larry Darrell, The Razor's Edge
  





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BooksCatsAndTea says...



Do not hurt your eyes,
Citrus will be your demise,
Ridiculous pain.
  





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AmadeusW says...



Ridiculous pain,
Why does it make me so vain?
Bring me water, please!
"The dead look so terribly dead when they're dead." - Larry Darrell, The Razor's Edge
  





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EditorAndPerks says...



plead for water now,
from a fresh, far-away spring,
or the kitchen sink.
The only thing we're allowed to do is to believe that we won't regret the choice we made.
- Levi Ackerman

Castle Grounds Consultant
  





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niteowl says...



Or the kitchen sink,
desert dry until you leave,
then it floods your world.
"You do ill if you praise, but worse if you censure, what you do not understand." Leonardo Da Vinci

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Traves says...



then it floods your world,
leaving clean and dry eyes
for the next venture.
  








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