Spring has come and gone the petals have shown grace with their vibrant exhibition, now wilted against the stem flowers have stopped blooming their hues have bleached out but their sweet aura still exists as it seeped down to the core. nature's rhythm shall soon revive and restore life into faded blooms so let us not mourn the passing, for the Spring will return again with all its glories and splendor it will bring a new hope and life to all the fields and gardens around.
Loss may fade the colors of life, but hope can always bring them back
I love the hope in this poem <3 I often find that the most honest, compelling type of hope comes from the simple fact that life is cyclical and we always seem to loop back to where we've been before - and this poem captures that feeling perfectly.
I also really like how you chose to capitalize only the first letters of the words "Spring" and "Loss" - because everything else is lowercase, it draws a lot of attention to those important concepts. Keep up the great work, H!
When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.
Dreams are a gateway to our past portal to worlds beyond human grasp. In slumber's embrace, we journey afar to realms where spirits and memories are.
The departed ones, they return to us again conjured by our mind, a fleeting space within. Their presence felt and their voices heard, though in reality their faces have blurred.
Cravings and logingness from daily lives are the key to portals when night arrives. Time bends and twists, memories entwined, as our minds create a world undefined.
In dreams, we find a moment's Solace, as we embrace their heavenly presence. Conversations held and hearts renewed, In dreams, the veil of death is subdued.
Feeling their vulnerable heart beat again we're reminded of our mistakes, and the pain. But the dawn breaks, and dreams fade away, Leaving us again with a bittersweet dismay.
But it's not the last time we'll meet, we know, For a new portal opens, as whispers of night grow. Dawn will come again to make the spirit go away we hold on to hope, for another rendezvous someday.
Their essence lingers, though dreams may wane, In our hearts, their love will forever remain.
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Poem 1 really resonates to me. I am very much feeling those "we've been here before" vibes this spring with the earth repeating its song again, and I like your reflection on how that ties in with hope.
Poem 2 I especially enjoyed this line: "In dreams, the veil of death is subdued." - in addition to the excellent use of consonance (!!) I think this is very poetic observation - that it is sometimes within dreaming or day-dreaming even that the veil of death is pulled back a little and we can live in the world with our passed loved ones again, if only for a moment. <3
Strong poems so far!
you should know i am a time traveler & there is no season as achingly temporary as now
The first poem- ah I mean I love it to the core, it flows sooo well and it has such a peaceful vibe This poem about loss and hope is perfectly captured by your references to spring.
Poem-2 I like this one even mooore! The second and sixth stanzas are my favorite.
I can sense that you have busy days and the fact that still you are trying NaPo is so great! I know you will get to your goal this napo. Keep writingđź‘Ť
the fledglings waiting still chirping with a hopeful prayer in cradle of twigs and leaves their loves will arrive in wings with food for the hungry beaks and tales to tell from a long day of men and world that awaits them tucked in love's embrace, no fears this sky will someday be theirs With strength and courage they'll soar, Their journey shall soon unfold.
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ahh this is all i could manage for this weekend. it's definitely incomplete at the moment.
i love the fact that you did a haiku for number five, seeing as it's 5/7/5...anyway, i really like it! it's simple, but intricate and beautiful. great job! <3
previously MomoandAppa, LordMomo, MomoMajesty, and dancingontheclouds
