Could you please rip apart this? Thanks in advance!
Tiger
"A superman ... is, on account of certain superior qualities inherent in him, exempted from the ordinary laws which govern men. He is not liable for anything he may do." Nathan Leopold
Hello, this is the poem I'm entering into the YWS Literary journal, I really need to have a good review on the puncuationand anything else thats needs to be fixed. This is the link--> topic73956.html
Thanks very very very much!!
~Rain~
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Hi there! If you find yourself with some spare time, could you please take a peek at this poem? topic75208.html It'd be greatly appreciated. Thanks! -Coral-
HELllo again. I know, I just posted. But you're pretty darn good at reviewing. SO, I was wondering if you could please take a peek at this poem: topic75824.html
I'm quite fond of the picture in my head that I associate it, and would like to clean it up a bit.
Hi Kitty! First off, I love your avatar! Secondly, could you pretty please give me one of your amazing reviews on my latest poem I wrote for someone special?! here is the link: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic76079.html So yeah I would really appreciate some nice critiquing, especially if it like included sardines and stuff..... (Cuz your a cat if you didn't get that...)
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If you may grace my humble short story with your excellent critique, miss Kitty, I would be greatly appreciate. I have been searching for a mature reader for this short story, and I find in you a perfect critic that would be able to give me a better understanding of my limitation. I shall await your reply.
Humbly yours,
RainWanderer.
Who am I? Just a wanderer, traveling from real life to dreams.
“Writing a book is a very lonely business. You are totally cut off from the rest of the world, submerged in your obsessions and memories.” - Mario Vargas Llosa
A hero isn’t defined by winning. Loads of heroes die in the effort. Most of them never get any recognition. No, a hero is just somebody who does the right thing when it would be far, far easier to do nothing.
Hi, Kitty! My novel could use some reviews, it would be great if you could read the two chapters. Here it is: novel.php?id=1118
Take your time and thank you in advance!
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When your heart gets pierced with arrows, don't rip them out and pierce those around you in retribution for your hurt. You'll only unnecessarily wound others and bleed to death yourself. — LadyMysterio
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