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I only want you to review the prologue for now. Seeing as how I'm redoing the entire story and haven't had a chance to update the other parts.

Thank you. (I REALLY need help with this piece)
~Berlyn Rae




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This is my first chapter to Ghost of Theater Two
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if you wouldn't mind
~Thanks
Berlynn Rae




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Living in my own fairyworld... without rules or boundaries i am free


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Hey I'mhero,
can you review this please work.php?id=96765
and please make it harsh...i just need to know where it stands




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I would like the harshest review you can possibly serve for this messy little work of fiction I am thinking of submitting to a contest. Attack it in whatever ways you feel are justified- fire at will! I await whatever bombshells you can throw at me with anticipation. :)

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Thanks so much my dear fellow human being.

-The Nameless
They say the eyes
Are windows to the soul
I say the earth
The sky
The moon
The very breath upon my lips
All of these
Are windows
To you




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got two short stories for you, lets see what you can do.
"And though I'll think of you I guess
Until the day I die
I think I miss you less and less
As every day goes by"




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Hey guys, sorry all the post I haven't got to will be gotten, maybe not big post because I am very busy and I am trying my best, thanks though :) and sorry if your offended.
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Hey Hero!

Having recieved helpful reviews from you in the past, I back to pester you.

Do you remember Tasia?

From the prologue and chapter one: www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=95999

And chapter two: www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=96633

If so, disregard those past two links. If not, there's where I'm coming from, when I present: Chapter Three- in two parts!

Part one is here: www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=97113
and
Part two is here: www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=97115

Thanks so much!

~Shady

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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hush, my sweet
these tornadoes are for you


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Hey everyone, I really hate to do this but i simply cannot find enough time in my day to accept the short novels and chapters. I honestly hate undermining the amount of your work by not even reading the work. There is honestly just so much effort that I cannot do justice. You guys should remember that I am a devolving writer myself and my review for them may NOT be a very informed one due to the fact I never wrote one myself.

I am better at poetry. I can take them apart for you and my impressions are so much better than other prompts and so I have decided to stick with poetry and very poetic prompts.

Please remember: I will do poetic prompts (& short stories that are relatively short.)


Sincerely, Hero
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Hero, could you review this for me? work.php?id=97088
But they all didn’t see the little bit of sadness in me.




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or this? work.php?id=97062
But they all didn’t see the little bit of sadness in me.




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Done, thanks for choosing me as a reviewer. :)
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I went to confront noisy neighbours, only to find the windows dark, stuck with two notes. The ghost, too, had "gone fishing". Something still whistled.
— Liminality