Hye Lava! Its my first attempt to write a fiction story. http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic66058.html Would you please review it? I would like to know in what aspects of writing I need to improve on. Thanks.
"The main thing is to keep the main thing the main thing. ~~ Steven Covey " "For me, writing is a world where I am desperately trying to find my voice"
A note is that you DO NOT need to read the first chapter because every chapter it will switch between two characters. Thus this chapter is completely unrelated, as of now, to the first chapter. If you plan on reading future chapters than it will make much more sense if you read the first one.
"If the king doesn't lead, how can he expect his subordinates to follow?"
