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CastlesInTheSky · 2008-12-01T23:37:31Z

Disclaimer: The establishment is not responsible for any injury, blood loss, or health detrimentation that these reviews may induce. It would make Queen Sarah delighted if you requested a review from the castle, so please do so. Being royal, our critiques are the creme de la creme , detailed and helpful, with quality as well as excessive quantity. * > NO multiple chapter requests, but feel free to ask for a crit a second time. > Peeps who've critted my stuff will be favoured. > Don't stalk me for critiques if I'm a bit late. You'll be ignored and your request deleted. * Warning: If you cannot take this kind of collossal slaughtering, then I suggest you go elsewhere. [Link to an example of a critique of mine. It's at the bottom of the page.] Golden Rules: Tell me the title, link, and genre of your piece. Example: Title: Story Of Wonder And Doom Link: http://youngwriterssociety.com/storyofwonderanddoom Genre: Fantasy Genres: Sarah Would Smile Upon: -Historical -Romantic -Other -Poetry -Non-Fiction -Fantasy Sarah Would Frown Upon: -Fan-fiction -Sci-Fi -Adventure/Action. * I will give details on spelling mistakes, grammatical mistakes, your strengths, your weaknesses, characters, storyline, description, overall and your writing style. If you want specific help/comments on an area of your piece, just tell me what that is in your request. * Completed: The Promise by springrain Snowflakes by mizziceberg A Titleless Story by lucyy [url=http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic30187.html[/url]Carson Lanye's Story[/url] by CK Lynn The Mansion - 1 by Lord Anzius The Mansion - 2 by Lord Anzius Predicament by kissthewitch Eternal Sunshine by AngelOfDeath Tamia's Quest by Nutty The Zipper Of Your Pants by Nutty So Goes the Museum by Galerius Famous Last Words by dreamintechnicolour Alone by springrain2693 Chapter One [Untitled] by Haruno Sakura Pretty People by antipop Red,Blue,Purple by TeddyBear22 Short Horror Story by Lucyy. Ch 1-Scavenger by TL-G Wooster Sister by Ducati Watching Mermaids by sofi Angel's Symphony -5 by angels-symphony Walking in the Dark by LoveableLittleSock Jimmy by Ducati Bubbling Chapter 10 by Demeter Chapter 4 by Blink Short Story by lost_in_dreamland Them by lakegirls Scavenger - 1.1 by TL G-Wooster The Forest by Anna09 * In Queue: None On with the [s]slaughtering[/s] reviewing.

CastlesInTheSky

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Mon Jan 12, 2009 7:42 pm

CastlesInTheSky says... · Mon Jan 12, 2009 7:42 pm

Hehe. Don't worry now actually.
The contest is over so I've done yours [Anna09] anyway. xD

Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.

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Mon Jan 12, 2009 9:34 pm

Lord Anzius says... · Mon Jan 12, 2009 9:34 pm

Here it is... The third chapter. What will happen to our beloved Jack this time?

read more below

Name: The mansion chapter 3 (Dust an' Products)
genre:other fiction

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic35811.html

To copy reality is good... But to create reality is much, much better.
-Giuseppe Verdi-

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Fri Jan 16, 2009 1:59 pm

CastlesInTheSky says... · Fri Jan 16, 2009 1:59 pm

Anzius' is done!

Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.

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Sat Jan 17, 2009 2:31 am

RGallagher says... · Sat Jan 17, 2009 2:31 am

You can review mine if you like!
topic41470.html
and if you're bored by any chance....
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I will <3 you forever and ever! (Plus give you a cookie.)

Hope you like them!

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Sat Jan 17, 2009 7:52 pm

CastlesInTheSky says... · Sat Jan 17, 2009 7:52 pm

Hey RGallagher. xD If you'd read the rules properly, you would'a seen I don't do multiple requests. But I'll overlook that and do your first one anyway. ^_^

Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.

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Sat Jan 17, 2009 10:08 pm

RGallagher says... · Sat Jan 17, 2009 10:08 pm

Actually, it says "NO multiple chapter requests, but feel free to ask for a crit a second time. " It doesn't say anything about multiple unrelated requests. =] <3

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Sat Jan 17, 2009 11:33 pm

CastlesInTheSky says... · Sat Jan 17, 2009 11:33 pm

When I said feel free to ask for a crit a second time, I meant in a different post. But yeah, that really wasn't clear at all. :lol:

Thanks for bringing it up. xD

Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.

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Sun Jan 18, 2009 1:21 am

Adnamarine says... · Sun Jan 18, 2009 1:21 am

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Depending on people's reaction to it, I may consider submitting this to the Journal? It's poetry.

Thanks so much, in advance! And please let me know if I can return the favor (just post in my 'review for food' thread xD)

"Half the time the poem writes me." ~Meshugenah

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Sun Jan 18, 2009 4:42 pm

Evi says... · Sun Jan 18, 2009 4:42 pm

*sighs*

Ah, Sarah. You're infamous for terribly marvelous critiques, you know that? I'm almost afriad to ask for a review from the Castle.

Almost.

So, if you have the time to look over something written by your lowly, loyal subject...

Link: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic42139.html

Title: Dusting off Angels

Genre: Other Fiction

Hopefully, my newbie-ness will not show and this link will work properly. We shall see.

Thanks in advance.

~Evi

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Sun Jan 18, 2009 8:11 pm

CastlesInTheSky says... · Sun Jan 18, 2009 8:11 pm

Sure thing, Evi!

Aww, you're too nice! xD Yep, flattery's the way to win me. Lawl. Just kidding.

Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.

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Sun Jan 18, 2009 8:12 pm

CastlesInTheSky says... · Sun Jan 18, 2009 8:12 pm

Whoops, didn't see your post, Adna!

Workin' on it right away. *rolls up sleeves*

Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.

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Mon Jan 19, 2009 5:12 pm

CastlesInTheSky says... · Mon Jan 19, 2009 5:12 pm

Adna's is done!

Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.

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Sat Jan 24, 2009 4:16 am

Rascalover says... · Sat Jan 24, 2009 4:16 am

will you review this please
topic42534.html

Genre: Romantic fiction
word count:1170ish

Please and thank you

Tiffany

There is nothing to writing; all you do is sit down at a typewriter and open a vein~ Red Smith

Who needs a review?

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic38078.html

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Sat Jan 24, 2009 3:37 pm

Antigone Cadmus says... · Sat Jan 24, 2009 3:37 pm

...

Um, is Sarah going to be doing reviews anymore?

I don't think she's coming back to YWS, is she?

Just wondering...

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nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior.
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Sat Jan 24, 2009 8:51 pm

Rosendorn says... · Sat Jan 24, 2009 8:51 pm

She's not purple anymore, so I don't know.

I hope so, though.

A writer is a world trapped in a person— Victor Hugo

Ink is blood. Paper is bandages. The wounded press books to their heart to know they're not alone.

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