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Theodorable
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Thu Dec 18, 2008 6:21 pm
Theodorable says... · Thu Dec 18, 2008 6:21 pm
Here's mine!
topic40372.html
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Theodorable
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Thu Dec 18, 2008 6:22 pm
Theodorable says... · Thu Dec 18, 2008 6:22 pm
Here's mine!
topic40372.html
Driver picks the music, shotgun shuts his cake hole. -Dean, Supernatural




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Lord Anzius
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Thu Dec 18, 2008 9:08 pm
Lord Anzius says... · Thu Dec 18, 2008 9:08 pm
HELP MEEEEE!

Many people normally don't read what I have written before the poem starts and just start reviewing, when they review they start asking questions, and I have to explain them that this is a short story written in a poem form, and that it has been divided into four chapters. Here are the four short chapters of the poem/story of a murder convict.

Please review:

The Head man’s hill:

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic35871.html

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic35950.html

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic35990.html

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic36041.html
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lucyy
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Thu Dec 18, 2008 9:10 pm
lucyy says... · Thu Dec 18, 2008 9:10 pm
Now, this started off as a story piece for English, but now I have it handed in and graded, I was thinking that I would love to expand on it a bit more. So, I would love a harsh, truthful critique, please, to help me along with this new working progress.
It's in 'Other Fiction' and is a short horror story. Please, take your time on it, here is the link and many, many thanks in advance!! :D

topic36701.html

--Lucyy xx
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CastlesInTheSky
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Fri Dec 19, 2008 2:19 pm
CastlesInTheSky says... · Fri Dec 19, 2008 2:19 pm
I'm getting to them, people. There may be somewhat of a long wait though as I'm on holiday now and intend to relax from critiquing for a while.
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.




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Twit
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Sat Dec 20, 2008 3:03 pm
Twit says... · Sat Dec 20, 2008 3:03 pm
Title: Scavenger (Chapter One)
Link: post471223.html#471223
Genre: Fantasy/Alternate History

If and when you have enough time to get to it. :D
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CastlesInTheSky
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Sat Dec 20, 2008 6:22 pm
CastlesInTheSky says... · Sat Dec 20, 2008 6:22 pm
Lord Anzius, the above says that multiple requests are no longer accepted.

Twooster, I'm workin' on it. :wink:
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.




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Princess
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Sun Dec 21, 2008 4:45 am
Princess says... · Sun Dec 21, 2008 4:45 am
This is the first poem I have posted this month, so it would be great to know if I was getting rusty or not.


topic40512.html

Thanks!
I came into this world wrinkled and ugly. And no matter how much I accumulate here, it's a short journey. I will go out of this world wrinkled and ugly. So I enjoy life.




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CastlesInTheSky
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Sun Dec 21, 2008 5:16 pm
CastlesInTheSky says... · Sun Dec 21, 2008 5:16 pm
Aye aye. :wink:
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.




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CastlesInTheSky
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Sun Dec 21, 2008 5:53 pm
CastlesInTheSky says... · Sun Dec 21, 2008 5:53 pm
Twooster, I've done you a critique three times and each time my klutzy fingers have managed to delete it from the depths of my computer. I think your critique simply is not fated to be done today, so I'll leave it for tommorow. :wink: Sorry about the delay.
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.




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CastlesInTheSky
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Tue Dec 23, 2008 11:36 am
CastlesInTheSky says... · Tue Dec 23, 2008 11:36 am
Yay! Twooster's is finally done! :elephant:
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.




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Ducati
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Tue Dec 23, 2008 11:51 am
Ducati says... · Tue Dec 23, 2008 11:51 am
topic40565.html
Genre: Lyric Poetry
I really bared a little of my hidden self in this poem, I think it is quite good, but I would like to perfect it. You give very comphrehensive reviews from what I have seen, so I would like it if you could review it for me. :)




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sofi
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Tue Dec 23, 2008 1:43 pm
sofi says... · Tue Dec 23, 2008 1:43 pm
Hey Sarah!

Since I am a very firm fan of yours I would love if you could possibly review my piece and bestow some of your brilliance upon it :D

Title: Watching Mermaids
Link: topic40423.html (I hope that's the link!)
Genre: Other Fiction

Take your time, though since it's christmas and you seem to have a lot of requests!

Have a wonderful christmas! :D

Sofi.
'Don't you just love these long rainy afternoons in New Orleans when an hour isn't just an hour but a little bit of Eternity dropped into your hands- and who knows what to do with it?'
T.W.




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CastlesInTheSky
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Tue Dec 23, 2008 6:19 pm
CastlesInTheSky says... · Tue Dec 23, 2008 6:19 pm
Okie-dokie, sofi!
I'm getting round to all of them, guys. Just bear with me.
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.




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CastlesInTheSky
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Wed Dec 24, 2008 3:59 pm
CastlesInTheSky says... · Wed Dec 24, 2008 3:59 pm
You might have to be patient. I'm a bit tied down at the moment.
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.



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