Critiques, Anyone?

I haven't written fluff in ages, but if you'd look at this one for me, I'd be ever-so-grateful.

Crazy Little Thing I

Oh! Oh! Me! Me! I've got a three part story, is that OK?

Tangled Up In Blue.

EDIT: I just noticed you reviewed my überlong story in the Advanced Critiques section. Thanks a lot!

Well seeing as you all but pleaded....



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If you could crit this I'd be so grateful

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Darling! *huggles* Well, you're just about the coolest person on site now, arent' you? As such, I was wondering if you'd be so good as to take a look at the prologue and first chapter of Gypsie Eyes: topic31678.html.

I've locked that big, humongous thread that everything was on before, and am now posting the chapters seperately. I'd really appreciate it if you could help me out, especially as I hope to get this one published. Is there anything I can critique for your in return?

Hey, J, guess who's back? I know, you're simply aghast at my return. Anyway, I have a little story that I'd like you to review. As always, I'll be more than happy to review something of yours in return. Here's the link: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic33082.html. Thanks.

I am finally caught up.

~JFW1415

Run, Fat Boy, Run! Day 7

I Love My Dirt; My Dirt Loves Me

-Jared

Hey, J, guess who's back? I know, you're saying, "I just reviewed some of his crap, how can he have more?" But I do. This story is in the same universe as a previous story, "And All This But Mere Perceptions." It looks at some of the things I used in that story, but I don't really know if it answers any questions about them. As always, I will review something of yours in return. Here's the story: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic33308.html. Thanks a bunch

Okay, I just posted this and I need reviews. It's the first chapter of a supernatural horror. Sorry, it's kind of long.

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P.S. Are you asking for anything in return?

Keeping Time

It's short, less than 1,000 words. I'd love general help. You know, the overall stuff. Does it work? Is it realistic? How are my details? I'm not particularly fond of the title, so help in that area would be awesome!

Possibly? ^_^

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All caught up except for doing more of Gypsie Eyes for gryf and a 55 page story for niccy_v that I'm doing a little at a time. Any others?

~JFW1415

How about this? http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic33638.html

Here's a shocker: This story happens without any paranormal or science fiction parts to it. I know, what happened to me, right?

Jen, could you please review my piece "Faerie Wings"? It's very short, but I'd like you to tear it to shreds for me.

Thanks!

-Stella x