Critiques, Anyone?

hey i would love for you to check out my new poem

topic33727.html

if it is too much of an overload please don't worry about it, but if you have time it would be greatly appreciated thank you

This thread is currently closed so I can catch up.

If you're amazing and give me thousands of critiques on my work (like Sam!) then feel free to still ask me for them through PMs. If I don't even know you, please don't - just wait a week or so. If you have a piece that has already been requested but you don't see a critique or it on the list in the spoiler, PM me.

~JFW1415

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic33997.html

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28958.html this one's real old

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic33510.html real short

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic33755.html there's a connection to an earlier story in this one, will you see it?


You brought this upon yourself, don't you know.

Wellity, your request was received and answered. In return, I have followed your instructions.


Shadow of the Sun:

topic30962.html

(Despite the link, its the following chapters that need the attention, XD)

Magda:

topic33439.html

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Cheers

It's edited enough that I'd love you to take a second look. Admittedly it's only a paragraph or so longer but I think you'll like the changes:

post406362.html#406362

I look forward to seeing you on my own thread =) Also, when you've finished this, you should check out my contest: post406380.html#406380

You wanted it: topic29067.html <- Pandora's Box.

This is for Day Tripper but since I'll probably forget to tell her that you said this, here's Chapter 1 of Welcome to Miami: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic27713.html

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic34833.html

So much for your critique thread being closed, huh?

*Is CLOSED*

Please see original notice.

Sorry for any inconveniences.

~JFW1415

I'll lock this for now then, just cuz. Bug me or anybody else when you want to reopen it.