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Hm. I'd pick it up, if only to find out what the title means. I dont get much of an impression from it though. It seems a strange combo.

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Somehow I don't think this is a fantasy. Something to do with a group of teenagers? Lost teenagers? A horror? However, if it were indeed a fantasy, I think it would be urban. It would deppend on the cover art if I would pick it up (I'm a sucker for cover art, lol).


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I love how it's almost a humorous titles it's so "The ___ of ____" but in a witty way. I'd probably pick it up just to figure out what it was about.


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I've already seen your banner for this. I'd say it was something steam-punk with all sorts of machines and lovely characters. Think Howl's Moving Castle.

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Cardboard makes me think of something boring, which puts me off the title. However, it's an interesting combination of words, which might mean I take a second look.

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i'd probably read it, but it sounds like it has the potential to become cliche.



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Ooh, interesting. Again, I'm a sucker for cover art, but I'd probably pick it up. It's a fantasy, maybe?


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It sounds like one of Wynne Jones' snarky/sarcastic books about cliched fantasy. :D That said, I'd totally pick it up.

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It's a bit random? Clock's a very English, finite word. Your readers get an instant picture and it's not exactly grand? I would think the story'd be a cool concept, but you might want to twist the title a little.

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a book of Shel Silverstein poetry. haha.


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I think of a (sorry, here >_>) homosexual guy coming out into the world.

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A fantasy story. most likely with a little girl who finds herself on her own with a small but very precious artefact given to her by her Father just before he died. She finds out it is really important and can save the Kingdom.

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Some kind of coming-of-age tale where the young person has an older person for guidance.

I'm not sure what it means, either.

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Hm.... Does not seem like a book I would pick up, if truth to be said. Kind of not my type. I think of a 4-6 grade story/book at the title; however, if the cover art was impressive (sucker for cover art, here) then I would take a second glance.


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cool. :D i like it. i would totally pick it up. sounds like it would make me laugh. have you ever read the Enchanted Forest Chronicles? Talking to Dragons, Searching for Dragons, Dealing with Dragons? it sounds like it would read a little like those.


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